Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The graph illustrates the number of people who participated in various activities at a social center in Melbourne, Australia from 2000 to 2020.
Overall, it is clear that film club became increasingly popular throughout the period while,the number of people participating in amateur dramatics declined over time . Moreover, table tennis showed significant growth over the years.
It is clear that film club remained dominant all over the time, around 60 to 65 number of individuals involved. On the other hand, amateur dramatics experienced a dramatic fell aound 30 to almost 0.
Moreover, number of participants fluctuated in marital arts around 30 to 40 from 2000 to 2020. Therefore, table tennis experi.enced a significant climb after 2010, around 20 to 50, respectively. Numer of people later on involved in musical performances after 2005, from 0 to almost 10.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The student provides an overview of the main trends shown in the graph, noting the rise of the film club and table tennis, and the decline of amateur dramatics. Key data points are generally reported, such as the film club remaining around 60 to 65 and table tennis climbing after 2010. However, there are some inaccuracies in reporting specific figures, and the response falls below the required 150-word minimum, containing only 138 words. This results in a negative penalty affecting the final task achievement score. To reach a higher band, the student must ensure all key features are accurately cited and meet the minimum length requirement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is structured with an introduction and body paragraphs, providing a logical progression of ideas. Cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'Moreover', and 'On the other hand' are used to link statements together. However, paragraphing is somewhat disjointed, with very short, fragmented sentences making the structure feel mechanical rather than fluid. Referencing is generally clear, but the lack of fully developed cohesive links across the text prevents it from reaching a higher band. Improving the flow between sentences and organizing the data into more cohesive thematic paragraphs would enhance this area.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The student attempts some less common vocabulary, such as 'dominant', 'fluctuated', and 'significant climb'. However, there are noticeable lexical inaccuracies and awkward phrasing, such as 'dramatic fell' instead of 'dramatic fall' and 'marital arts' instead of 'martial arts'. Spelling and word-choice errors occur, such as 'experi.enced', which slightly impede natural communication. While the vocabulary used is minimally adequate to convey the basic trends, expanding the range of paraphrasing and ensuring precise word forms would elevate the lexical score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The student demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, utilizing introductory clauses and subordinate structures. However, grammatical errors are frequent throughout the response, including missing articles and prepositions, such as 'around 60 to 65 number of individuals' and 'number of participants fluctuated in marital arts'. Punctuation errors also appear, such as the comma placement in 'while,the number'. These errors occasionally cause slight difficulty for the reader. Greater control over grammatical accuracy and sentence structure is needed for a higher band.
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