Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-22
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The linear representation demonstrates the data related to the number of participants for various activities at a social centre situated in Melbourne, Australia for period of 20 years.
Overall, the number kept on fluctuate during given years regarding their enrollment in several activities. However, majority of people took part in film club and least were in amateur dramatics which was introduced in 2005.
In 2000, 65 particapents took part in film club and it decreased gradually to 60 in 2010. Moreover, it rose steadily till 2020 by 10 folks. Music performences were introduced in 2005 and recorded a significant climb of 10 people in next year. However, the number had a steady increase of 5 till 2020. Furthermore, in 2000, approximately 15 people anticipated in table tennis and reached 20 in 2005. It levelled off till 2020 and increased significantly by 32 in following years. Nearly 27 people were enrolled in amateur dramatics and number remained same in 2005. However, it witnessed a dramatic fall of 20 during given period. Approximately 35 people participated in mattial arts and trend recorded a dip of 5 folks in 2005 and recovered to same level in 2015. The number levelled off from [redacted phone].
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The student covers all the key trends shown in the graph, presenting data for the film club, martial arts, amateur dramatics, table tennis, and musical performances over the 20-year period. However, there are minor factual inaccuracies in data reading; for instance, stating that musical performances were introduced in 2005 (when the data clearly starts at zero in 2000 and 2005) and describing amateur dramatics as being introduced in 2005. The overview identifies some general trends correctly, but misidentifies the lowest participation activity. Despite these flaws, the main features and comparisons are highlighted adequately. This fits the criteria for Band 6.0, where all parts of the task are addressed, but some details are under-developed or slightly inaccurate.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The response is arranged into logical paragraphs, starting with an introductory sentence, followed by an overview paragraph, and then detailed body paragraphs. Cohesive devices such as 'However', 'Moreover', and 'Furthermore' are used to connect ideas, although some transitions feel a bit mechanical or forced. Paragraphing is adequate, but the final body paragraph is quite dense and combines multiple disparate trends without clear sub-grouping, making it slightly harder to follow. Referencing is generally clear, but overall progression within paragraphs lacks seamless cohesion. This performance aligns well with Band 6.0 descriptors.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, attempting some less common lexical items such as 'fluctuate', 'enrollment', 'significant climb', and 'dramatic fall'. However, there are several spelling errors ('particapents', 'performences', 'anticipated' instead of participated, 'mattial' instead of martial) and awkward collocations like 'by 10 folks'. The range of vocabulary is sufficient to convey the main points, but word choice errors and typos prevent the score from reaching a higher band. This corresponds to a Band 6.0 level.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
The student demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, utilizing clauses introduced by 'while', 'as', and conjunctions. There are, however, several grammatical errors and awkward phrasings, such as 'for period of 20 years' (missing article), 'the number kept on fluctuate' (incorrect verb form), and 'number remained same' (missing article). Punctuation is generally acceptable, and while errors are present, they rarely impede overall communication. This matches the Band 6.0 descriptor, which highlights a mix of simple and complex structures with some persistent errors.
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