Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-22
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The graph illustrates the numbers of participants in numerous social activities in a center of melbourne city of Austrailia between 2000 and 2020.
overall, it can be seen that, film club was popular in throught the peried. Whereas the number of participant decreased with given time period.Hance, the people interest in martial were flectuated until the terminal year.
In 2000, the number of paticipant was maximum at about 65. it showed constant trend throuought the period. Furthermore,martial art popularity noticed few flectuation unti
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response is severely under-length, containing only 83 words compared to the required 150-word minimum, which heavily impacts Task Achievement. Furthermore, the writing cuts off mid-sentence at the end ("until"). While the student attempts to introduce the graph and mentions a few trends such as the film club and martial arts, the information provided is very limited, fragmentary, and contains inaccurate readings of the chart (e.g., claiming participant numbers for the film club decreased, whereas they remained relatively stable and high). Due to the incomplete nature of the response and failure to meet the word count, it falls into Band 4.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The text exhibits severe structural and organizational issues. It begins with an introduction, but the body paragraphs are disjointed and the response ends abruptly in the middle of a sentence. Cohesive devices are attempted ("overall", "Whereas", "Hance"), but spelling and usage are faulty ("Hance" instead of Hence, "flectuated" instead of fluctuated). Paragraphing is erratic and incomplete. Because the information and ideas are not arranged coherently and the text is cut short, a Band 4.0 is appropriate.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The lexical range is basic and limited. The student attempts some less common vocabulary items such as "flectuated" (fluctuated) and "terminal year", but these are marred by spelling errors and awkward collocations. There are also frequent spelling and capitalization errors throughout the text, such as "melbourne" instead of Melbourne, "Austrailia" instead of Australia, and "throuought" instead of throughout. While meaning can sometimes be deciphered, the vocabulary errors and limited range restrict the score to Band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response shows a very limited range of grammatical structures. Simple sentences dominate, and attempts at complex structures contain frequent errors. There are notable errors in punctuation and capitalization, missing articles (e.g., "in center of melbourne"), and incorrect verb forms. Additionally, the text is unfinished, ending abruptly. These persistent errors and the lack of structural variety place the response firmly in Band 4.0.
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