Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-22
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The graph illustrate the information on the number pf participants for different task at one social centre in Melbourne,Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Overall,the information on the number of participants in filmclub was increased minimally. However, the Martial arts experirnced a flacuation. Moreover, there was gradual increased in Tbale tennice throught out the period. Whereas, the Amateur dramatics was decline dip. However, there was a minimal increase in Musical performance at the end of the period.
According to the period, the Filmclub had the highest number of participants approximately 65 tonnes in 2000,which foced to decline around 60 tonnes in 2010,while again reached at the peak of 65 tonnes at the end of the period. However, there was a flacuation in Martial arts with 35 tonnes,overtalking Table tennis rose sharply by the year while reaching 15 tonnes to 50 tonnes at the end. Whereas, the Musical performance experienced a minimal increased from 0 to 13 tonnes at the end of the period.
In contract, the Amateur dramatics dropped marginally to about 25 in 2000 after decreasing 5 tonnes in 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The student attempts to cover the main features of the line graph, including general trends for the various activities such as the rise in table tennis and the decline in amateur dramatics. However, there are significant factual inaccuracies in reporting the data. For instance, the student refers to the unit of measurement as "tonnes" instead of participants, which reflects a serious misinterpretation of the chart data. Additionally, specific figures are inaccurate or poorly described, such as claiming film club peaked at 65 tonnes or that musical performances increased to 13 tonnes when they started at 0 and reached approximately 18. While an overview is present, the inaccurate data reporting and misinterpretation of the y-axis units pull the score down to Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is organised into multiple paragraphs, including an introduction and an overall summary. However, the logical progression is frequently disrupted by awkward transitions, mechanical use of cohesive devices like "However" and "Whereas", and dense grouping of unverified figures. Referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult to follow the comparisons between activities. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal cohesion within paragraphs is often faulty. Therefore, the response demonstrates the characteristics of Band 5.0 for coherence and cohesion.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is quite limited and repetitive, with noticeable errors that impede communication and demonstrate misunderstanding of the prompt's context. Most notably, the student repeatedly uses the incorrect noun "tonnes" instead of participants. Other lexical errors include "flacuation" (fluctuation), "Tbale tennice" (Table tennis), and "throught out". While there are attempts to use vocabulary of change such as "increased", "decline", and "sharply", the frequency of lexical errors and strange word choices keeps the response firmly at Band 4.5, rounded to 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but the writing is marred by frequent grammatical and mechanical errors. Examples of errors include subject-verb agreement issues ("The graph illustrate"), incorrect prepositions and verb forms ("was increased minimally", "was decline dip", "foced to decline"), and spelling mistakes. Punctuation is also erratic, with missing spaces after commas throughout the response. Because these frequent errors cause difficulty for the reader and obscure meaning, the grammar warrants a Band 5.0.
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