Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-22
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The line graph compares the number of participant of five different acttivity in 2000 to 2020
overall the flim club and amateur dramatics are the highest in the nearest period of 2000. where martial arts is remain steady in all year
in 2000 the highest is the flim club upto 65 number of participant and there is no musicial perforamce in that year . however in 2005 the musical has shown increased and risen in the newest period . martial art shows the intensity of growth and fall in every year and had same ratio till 2020.
thge second highrest is the table tennis in the recent years it has suddenly increase than other activity. in 2005 to 2010 it has same quantity but has maxmize the participant and improve there activities upto 55 . only 10 number is less than flim club . in the last amateur dramatics is the fallen hardly to the lowest .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to cover the main features of the graph, such as identifying the film club and amateur dramatics trends, but the descriptions are frequently inaccurate or difficult to follow due to poor expression. For instance, stating that amateur dramatics and the film club were 'the highest in the nearest period of 2000' is vague, and the claim that amateur dramatics 'fallen hardly to the lowest' while true misses precise reporting of figures. The overview lacks clarity, and some trends are mischaracterized. It addresses the task partially, placing it at a Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The text lacks proper paragraphing, appearing as a single dense block of ideas without clear transitions between sentences. Cohesive devices are minimal, mechanical, or misused (e.g., 'where martial arts is remain steady', 'thge second highrest'). There is no clear overall progression of information, and the relationships between ideas are often obscured by poor referencing and punctuation. This places the response firmly in the Band 4.0 category.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very basic and repetitive, with numerous spelling errors throughout the text (e.g., 'acttivity', 'flim', 'musicial', 'perforamce', 'thge', 'highrest'). Words are frequently used in incorrect word forms or collocations, such as 'intensity of growth and fall' or 'has same quantity'. The lexical range is limited and frequently strains the reader's comprehension, corresponding to a Band 4.0 level.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
Grammatical control is weak, with a very limited range of sentence structures and persistent, frequent errors. Examples include tense inconsistencies and incorrect verb forms ('martial arts is remain steady', 'the musical has shown increased', 'it has suddenly increase'). Punctuation and capitalization are largely neglected, and basic sentence boundaries are frequently blurred. These errors cause considerable difficulty for the reader, fitting the Band 4.0 descriptors.
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