Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-23
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given graph represent the percentage on number of participants for several activities at one social centre in Melbourne city, Australia between the year 2000 and 2020.
Overall, there are five major activities including film club, martial arts, amateur dramatics, table tennis and musical performances. We can see fluctuation throught these years but film club participants was rated highest among all. While, amateur dramatics witnessed a dramatic fall in its percentage.
To begin with, film club participants increased from 64% in 2000 to 67% in 2020. Undoubtedly, table tennis had grown its number from 18% to 63%. There is nothing in the record from the year 2000 to 2005. It begins in 2005 and stood at 19% in 2020.
Furthermore, we can see that there is fluctuation in the martial arts category. Percentage started off at 38% in 2000. Afterwards, it was quite unpredictable and than finally it stood at the same number where it started from. The category of amateur dramatics saw a steady decline throught all these years from 26% to 5%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to cover the main features of the graph, identifying the activities and noting overall trends such as the rise of film club and table tennis, and the fall of amateur dramatics. However, there are significant inaccuracies in reporting the data throughout the response. For instance, the student misinterprets the y-axis values as percentages rather than absolute participant numbers, and states incorrectly that musical performances 'begins in 2005 and stood at 19% in 2020', whereas the visual data shows it started at zero in 2010 and reached approximately 18 in 2020. The overview is somewhat vague and includes minor inaccuracies. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed in terms of accurate data reporting.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response is structured into distinct paragraphs, including an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs. This provides a basic framework. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes hindered by logical inconsistencies, such as abrupt transitions between unrelated data points. Cohesive devices are used, but their application is occasionally awkward or mechanical, such as 'To begin with' followed by a confusing mix of statistics, and 'than finally' (which also contains a spelling error). Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal logical flow requires better referencing and connective structure.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The student demonstrates an adequate vocabulary for the task, attempting some less common words and phrases such as 'fluctuation', 'dramatic fall', and 'unpredictable'. However, there are persistent lexical inaccuracies and unnatural word choices, most notably the continuous use of 'percentage' instead of 'number of participants' or absolute figures, as the graph measures raw numbers rather than percentages. Spelling and word form errors, such as 'throught' instead of 'throughout', also detract from the overall lexical score, though communication of the general trends is still achieved.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The writer employs a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, such as 'While, amateur dramatics witnessed a dramatic fall...' and 'Afterwards, it was quite unpredictable...'. There are several grammatical and mechanical errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues ('film club participants was rated highest'), incorrect prepositions ('in the record'), and spelling/typographical slips like 'throught' and 'than' instead of 'then'. While these errors do not completely obscure the intended meaning, they occur frequently enough to prevent the response from achieving a higher band.
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