Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-23
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The graph below illustrates the inforrmation on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social center in melbourne,Austraila for the period 2000 to 2020.
Overall the line graph gives the information of different activities .There are total five activities Flim club,Martial art,Amateur dramatics,Table tennis and Musical performances however each activity described by different symbols and also the number of the participants.
In 2000 the highest number of participants are 65% in flim club activity however in 2020 the number of participants in amateur dramatics is very low.furthermore Martial arts ,Amateur dramatics and Table tennis are the activities where 15 to 35% individuals participated in 2000 .the number of individuals in Table tennis are gradually stay steady from 2005 to 2010 and after that there is a sharp rise up till 2020.
Whereas the participants of Amateur dramatics activity there is a gradually decline from 2005 to till 2020 .however in Martial art there is slight fluctuation strating from 2000 to 2020 but the flim club activity is stay same from starting to till the end of 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to address the prompt by reporting on several activities from the graph. However, there are significant issues with data interpretation and accuracy. For instance, the writer reports that in 2000 the highest number of participants was '65%' in the film club, misreading the vertical axis unit (which represents absolute numbers up to 70, not percentages). Additionally, the overview is extremely basic and repetitive, merely echoing the prompt rather than synthesizing the main trends. While some trends are mentioned, such as the rise in table tennis and the decline in amateur dramatics, the overall task response lacks precision and clear comparative analysis, landing the response firmly in band 5.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The text is divided into four paragraphs, which shows an attempt at structuring an Academic Task 1 response. However, the progression within and between paragraphs is awkward. The second paragraph essentially repeats the introduction without adding substantive value, and transitions between sentences are frequently abrupt or mechanical, using linking words like 'however' and 'furthermore' somewhat incongruously. Referencing is occasionally unclear, and cohesive devices are inadequate or overused, leading to a choppy reading experience. Paragraphing is present, but the internal logical flow requires considerable improvement, aligning with band 5 descriptors.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is adequate to convey basic ideas about the chart, such as 'gradually stay steady', 'sharp rise', and 'gradually decline'. However, there are numerous spelling errors and inaccurate lexical choices, such as 'inforrmation', 'Flim club', 'Martial art' (missing plurals), and writing 'melbourne,Austraila' with uncapitalized and incorrect proper nouns. The student attempts some less common phrases like 'slight fluctuation', but overall the lexical range is limited and imprecise, and repeated errors in word form and spelling occasionally cause strain for the reader.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response exhibits a very limited range of grammatical structures. Simple sentences dominate, and attempts at complex structures are frequently flawed by missing articles, punctuation errors, and subject-verb agreement issues (e.g., 'the number of individuals in Table tennis are gradually stay steady'). Run-on sentences and punctuation omissions (such as missing periods or starting sentences with lowercase letters like 'the number of individuals...') detract significantly from accuracy. Frequent grammatical errors are present throughout the text, though they generally do not completely obscure the intended meaning.
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