Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-23
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph illustrates the data of players in Melbourne,Australia attended at particular social centre during 2000 to 2020.
Overall, the participants attended from different catogary like, Flim club, Martial arts, Amateur dramatics, Table tennis, and Musical performance, the highest data by 68% is among flim club and the lowest is musical at 9% by 2020 .
In 2000, the number of participants attened in film club was 65, followed by a drop seen in 2010 at 60 and gardually increased with 68 in 2020. Additionally, table tennis had 15 players with a gradual increase in 2010 of 17 reaching upto 52 in the 2020. Furthermore, martial arts had 35 members in 2000 remain stedily till 2020 besides few fluctaions.
However, in musical pefromances participants attended in 2005 with lowest number due to more attendence they gradually kept on incresing by 2020 with 15%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response attempts to cover the main features of the graph, presenting an overview and some specific data points such as the figures for the film club and table tennis. However, there are notable inaccuracies in the data reported, such as claiming that musical performances started in 2005 with the lowest number, whereas the chart shows zero participation in 2000 and 2005, and using percentages instead of actual participant numbers. Additionally, the response falls short of the 150-word minimum, containing only 144 words, which leads to a slight penalty in Task Achievement. Ideas are present but under-developed and lack precision in reporting the visual data.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The text is divided into four paragraphs, which provides a basic structural framework for an introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. However, logical progression is often hindered by abrupt transitions and poor referencing. For example, sentences within the body paragraphs lack smooth cohesive ties, and the phrase 'However, in musical pefromances participants attended in 2005 with lowest number' is disjointed and confusing. Paragraphing is attempted, but overall cohesion is mechanical and sometimes faulty.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is generally adequate for basic communication, but it features frequent spelling mistakes (e.g., 'catogary', 'Flim', 'attened', 'gardually', 'upto', 'remain stedily', 'fluctaions', 'pefromances', 'attendence', 'incresing') and word choice errors. While the writer attempts some less common vocabulary such as 'gradually increased' and 'fluctuations', the high density of lexical errors and reliance on basic terms restricts the score to this level.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but grammatical accuracy is weak throughout the response. There are frequent errors in verb tense, preposition usage, and sentence structure, such as 'The line graph illustrates the data of players in Melbourne,Australia attended at particular social centre during 2000 to 2020' and 'table tennis had 15 players with a gradual increase in 2010 of 17 reaching upto 52 in the 2020.' These errors occasionally cause difficulty for the reader.
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