Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-23
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph illustrates the information about the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the peried 2000 to 2020.
Overall, the figure of table tennis has increased and the figure of amateur dramatic has decrease continuously in 2020.
Firstly, the part of film club have same participants 64 between 2000 to 2020. More over, musical performances has increased from 0 to 20 participants in 2005 to 2020. On the other side, the part of amateus dramatics face a continous downtrend 26 to 9 from 2000 to 2020.
On the other hand, the activity of martial arts get minor decrease and increase but, at the end its participants is same as well in 2000. Furthermore, the activity of table tennis get minor pump 17 to 20 participants in 2000 to 2010 but, after this it get higher increament 20 to 51 participants in 2010 to 2020
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to cover the main features of the line graph, including the overall trends of table tennis and amateur dramatics. However, there are notable inaccuracies and omissions in the data reporting. For instance, amateur dramatics is stated to have decreased 'to 9' in 2020, whereas the graph shows it reaching approximately 6. Furthermore, musical performances did not start at 0 in 2005 as implied, but rather remained at zero until 2010. While an overview is attempted in the second sentence, it lacks completeness regarding all categories. The response satisfies the basic requirements of summarising the data, but the factual discrepancies and limited depth of comparison place it within Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The organisation of the response is somewhat disjointed. The text is broken into short, fragmented paragraphs ('Firstly', 'On the other side', 'On the other hand'), which creates a choppy flow rather than a cohesive progression of ideas. Cohesive devices are used, but they are often mechanical or misused, such as 'On the other side' and 'Furthermore'. Referencing is occasionally unclear, and the overall progression lacks a smooth logical thread. Paragraphing is attempted but needs better structuring to group related trends together, resulting in a Band 5.0 performance for this criterion.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, frequently relying on simple verbs like 'increase', 'decrease', and 'get' (e.g., 'get minor decrease', 'get higher increament'). There are noticeable spelling and word choice errors, such as 'peried', 'dramatic', 'amateus', and 'increament'. While the vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey the general idea of upward and downward trends, the lack of precision and spelling mistakes prevent the response from achieving a higher band score. This fits the description for Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response features a very limited range of grammatical structures. Most sentences are simple or attempted complex structures that contain frequent errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('the part of film club have same participants') and awkward phrasing ('at the end its participants is same as well'). Punctuation is also weak, with missing periods at the ends of sentences. While the meaning is generally decipherable, the high frequency of grammatical and mechanical errors places this response firmly at Band 4.5, rounded to 5.0 based on the presence of some correct simple clauses.
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