Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
This piece of writting some information about the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Overall, two main trends can be observed. First is that the participants of table tennis is increased rapitidly 2000 to 2020. Second is that the part of amateur dramatics get a downtrend 2005 to 2020.
Firstly, the figure of film club get minor decreased 65 to 62 participants between 2000 and 2010 but, after this it increased 62 to 69 participants between 2010 to 2020. Moreover, the figure of musical performances is increased 0 to 19 participants between 2005 to 2020. On the other side, participants of amateur dramatics is increased 26 to 29 participants between 2000 and 2005 but after that it faces a downtrend 29 to 9 participants between 2005 to 2020.
On the other hand, the participants of table tennis got minor increment 16 to 20 participants between 2000 and 2010 after that it get exploded 20 to 52 participants between 2010 and 2020. Furthermore, the part of martial arts iget minor increment and decrement but at the its participants remain same as well as before.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to address the task by reporting several features and comparisons from the graph, such as the trends for table tennis and amateur dramatics. However, there are significant inaccuracies in the data reported compared to the source material. For example, the student states that the figure for musical performances increased '0 to 19 participants', whereas the graph shows it reaching approximately 18. Similarly, amateur dramatics is said to fall to 9, when the graph shows it ending around 6. Furthermore, the introductory sentence is incomplete ('This piece of writting some information about...'). While an overview is attempted, the overall precision required for a Band 6 is compromised by these inaccuracies and awkward phrasing.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response is organized into paragraphs, attempting an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs detailing the trends. However, the progression is often disjointed due to repetitive mechanical connectors like 'First is that', 'Second is that', and 'Firstly'. Paragraphing is attempted, but the links between sentences feel mechanical rather than naturally cohesive. Referencing is occasionally unclear, such as 'the part of amateur dramatics get a downtrend'. This corresponds to the Band 5 descriptor where organisation is visible, but cohesive devices are inadequate and repetitive.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, with frequent word choice and spelling errors. For instance, 'writting' instead of writing, 'rapitidly' instead of rapidly, and 'get minor decreased' instead of 'experienced a minor decrease'. Phrases like 'get exploded' and 'iget minor increment' demonstrate poor collocation and control of less common vocabulary. While the reader can generally grasp the intended meaning, the lexical limitations and errors firmly place this response in the Band 5 category.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentences, but grammatical accuracy is very low. There are frequent missing verbs, incorrect tense usage, and faulty prepositional phrases throughout the text, such as 'the participants of table tennis is increased' and 'at the its participants remain same as well as before'. Subject-verb agreement errors are common (e.g., 'participants... is increased'). These frequent errors cause some difficulty for the reader and reflect the characteristics of Band 5, where attempts at complex structures are often faulty.
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