Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph illustrates the number of individuals that take part in different activities. These number of participants that take part in social centre in Melbourne , Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Overall, the number of participants that take part in table tennis rose substantially during the period, while that take part in martial arts fluctuate during this period. Furthermore, the individuals that participates in amateur dramatics declined gradually, however film club and musical performances has slightly increased respectively .
In 2000, only 10 participants take part in table tennis, however this participants gradually increased in 2020 and it reached approximately 51 participants. On the other hands, in 2000 people take part in martial arts its fluctuate remain consistent. Furthermore, amateur dramatics has gradually declined in 2000 to 2020, its number of participants was approximately 26, however the number of amateur dramatics declined its came only 2 participants in 2020. Lastly, in 2000 the number of participants that took part in film club activity was 66, but this was slightly increased in 2020, while in 2005 the number of participants that took part in musical performances also gradually increased in 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to address the task by reporting on the different activities shown in the line graph, including an overview of the main trends. However, there are significant inaccuracies in reporting the data. For instance, the student states that in 2000, 'only 10 participants take part in table tennis', whereas the graph clearly shows a starting figure of 16. Similarly, the starting figure for film club is misreported as 66 instead of approximately 64, and musical performances began at zero in 2000, not 2005. The overview identifies general trends such as the rise in table tennis and the decline in amateur dramatics, but the lack of precision and data errors pull the task achievement score down to Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response has an identifiable introduction and body paragraphs, showing some organisation. However, the overall progression is hampered by repetitive structures and weak cohesion. The writer uses basic connectors such as 'Furthermore' and 'On the other hands', but cohesive devices are frequently mechanical, inaccurate, or used redundantly. Paragraphing is attempted, but sentences within paragraphs lack smooth logical linking, resulting in a somewhat disjointed reading experience. Referencing is occasionally unclear, such as 'this participants' and 'its fluctuate remain consistent', which detracts from the flow. This performance aligns with Band 5.0 descriptors.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The student demonstrates a limited and repetitive range of vocabulary. Words such as 'participants', 'take part', and 'increased' are repeated excessively throughout the response. There are also notable lexical errors and awkward collocations, such as 'the individuals that participates', 'its fluctuate remain consistent', and 'its came only 2 participants'. While the basic meaning can be understood, the vocabulary lacks flexibility and precision, and spelling or word-choice errors are noticeable, placing the response firmly at Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but control over grammar is weak. There are frequent grammatical and punctuation errors throughout the text, including tense inconsistencies ('take part' instead of 'took part', 'fluctuate' instead of 'fluctuated'), subject-verb agreement errors ('These number of participants...'), and awkward sentence fragments ('while that take part in martial arts fluctuate during this period'). These frequent errors can cause difficulty for the reader, though communication is not entirely obscured, justifying a Band 5.0.
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