Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph depicts the information about the number of people took pary in different activities at one social centre in the city of Australia between the year 2000 and 2020.
Overall, it was fiund that the film club remained the most popular activity throughout the entire years despite having minor fluctuations whereas there wad a drastic rise in table tennis activity but amateur dramatics faced a decline.
In the given data, it was observed that from 2000 to 2020, the most common activity was film club in which more than 60 participants was there. The least popular activity in 2020 was table tennis, whereas, in the year 2020, no one took part in musical performances and it came into existence in 2005 and had steady increase in participation from 10 to 20 at the end of 2020.
On the other hand, table tennis faced an increase in paticipation between the year 2000 to 2020 and reached more than 50 participation whereas, in amateur dramas , it faced a downfall from 20 participation to just 10 was taking part in the year 2020. Also, martial arts remained steady throughout the year 2000 to 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The student attempts to address the task by reporting on the main activities shown in the line graph, providing an overview and mentioning key trends such as the popularity of the film club and the decline in amateur dramatics. However, there are notable factual inaccuracies and contradictions in the data reporting. For instance, the student states that 'The least popular activity in 2020 was table tennis,' which directly contradicts the visual data showing table tennis at 54 participants, whereas amateur dramatics dropped to 6. Furthermore, there are slight inaccuracies in describing musical performances and table tennis trends. While all parts of the task are addressed, the presence of data misinterpretations places this response at Band 5.5.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response has an overall structure consisting of an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs, providing a basic framework for the information. However, progression within the body paragraphs is occasionally disjointed and mechanical. Cohesive devices are used, but sometimes inaccurately or repetitively (e.g., excessive use of 'whereas' and 'on the other hand'). Paragraphing is attempted, but the grouping of ideas lacks clear logical cohesion, as some related details are scattered. Referencing is also occasionally unclear, contributing to a somewhat choppy reading experience. This aligns well with the Band 5.0 descriptors for Coherence and Cohesion.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is adequate to communicate basic ideas about trends and data, such as 'popular', 'decline', 'increase', and 'steady'. However, the range is limited and repetitive, and there are noticeable errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'toke pary' (took part), 'fiund' (found), and 'wad' (was). The student attempts some less common vocabulary like 'drastic rise', but overall control lacks precision. Collocations are sometimes awkward, such as 'reached more than 50 participation'. These frequent errors in word formation and spelling place the response firmly in the Band 5.0 category.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as using subordinate clauses with 'whereas' and 'despite'. However, control over grammar is weak, with frequent errors that occasionally impede understanding. Examples include tense inconsistencies and awkward phrasing like 'the number of people took pary in' instead of 'taking part'. There are also issues with subject-verb agreement and article usage, such as 'more than 60 participants was there' instead of 'were there'. Because complex structures are frequently faulty and errors are recurrent throughout the text, a band score of 5.0 is appropriate.
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