Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The graph illustrates the data on number of percentages for examples film club, martial arts and amateur dramatics, table tennis and musical performances in Australis between 2000 and 2020.
Overall the data presented in the graph pertains to number of participants 0 to 70. The principle focus on the graph is flim club and martial arts. Initially it reprsents the information regarding between 2000 and 2020. Additionally it represents information redarding amateur dramatics and table tennis.
Firstly film club 65% is the maximum which represents number of participants and the minimum value is table tennis whereny participants in 2000 is 10 t0 20 in between compare to the 2020 is almost 0%. On the other hand martial arts is 35% to 40% they are mostly incrased in straight line in between.
In the end amateur starting number of participants in 2000 is 25% and in 2010 decreased 5% they are steadily fell from 25% to zero.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The student attempts to address the prompt by describing several activities from the graph, such as the film club, martial arts, amateur dramatics, and table tennis. However, the response struggles significantly with accurate data reporting and fails to provide a clear, coherent overview of the main trends. For instance, the writer states that 'film club 65% is the maximum' and misinterprets table tennis data by claiming participants dropped to 'almost 0%' in 2020, when the chart actually shows a sharp increase to around 54. The use of percentages instead of raw numbers ('number of participants') is also inaccurate for this graph. Consequently, the ideas are under-developed, inaccurate, and fail to meet the higher expectations of Task Achievement, aligning closely with a Band 4.0 descriptor due to minimal and inaccurate task execution.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The response is divided into several paragraphs, showing a basic attempt at structural organisation. However, the logical progression is weak and disjointed. Sentences within paragraphs often lack clear thematic connection, such as the sudden shift in the second paragraph: 'The principle focus on the graph is flim club and martial arts. Initially it reprsents the information regarding between 2000 and 2020.' Cohesive devices are either misused or absent, and referencing is frequently unclear ('they are mostly incrased in straight line'). Paragraphing is attempted but fails to create a smooth, coherent flow of ideas. This places the response firmly within the Band 4.0 range.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The lexical range is extremely limited and repetitive. The student relies heavily on basic vocabulary and struggles with appropriate word choice and collocations, frequently misusing terms (e.g., 'percentages' instead of number of participants, 'whereny' instead of whereas). Spelling and word formation errors are noticeable throughout the text, including typos like 'flim' and 'reprsents'. While the vocabulary is minimally adequate to signal the topic of the graph, the constant errors in word choice and lexical control restrict the score to Band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The writer attempts some complex structures, but these are almost invariably faulty or incomplete, leading to frequent grammatical errors that obscure the intended meaning. Examples include 'amateur starting number of participants in 2000 is 25% and in 2010 decreased 5% they are steadily fell from 25% to zero.' Subject-verb agreement, tense consistency, and prepositions are frequently mishandled. Error-free sentences are very rare, and the high frequency of grammatical lapses strains the reader and impedes comprehension. This performance corresponds to a Band 4.0.
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