Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
he line graphs illustrate that the numbers of participants for different activities in a particular country Australia between 2000 and 2020.
Overall, the trend shows that film is the accounted largest proportion of perticipants from 2000 to 2020. In addition, table tennis and musical performances ended with a up ward trend . Martial arts flactuated all over the period . However, amateur dtamatics gradually fell.
In 2000 , film club was the largest participan group at around 65 and slightly fell at 60 in 2010, later climbed to approximately 65 in 2020. Table tennis started with 15 in 2000 and saw a minimally rise to 18 in 2010 before growing up at around 52 in 2020. Musical performances started from 2005 and gradually increased to 18 in 2020.
In contrast, Martial arts showed flactuations from 35 to 36 time period between 2000 and 2020. While amateur dramatics slowly grew up around 28 in 2005 before dropping at 5 in 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The student covers all parts of the task by reporting the main features and making relevant comparisons across the five activities shown in the graph. An overview is present, highlighting the general trends such as the film club accounting for the largest proportion and table tennis experiencing an upward trajectory. Key figures are generally reported correctly, such as the film club starting around 65 and table tennis finishing around 52 to 54 in 2020. However, there are minor misreadings or approximations in data reporting, such as stating table tennis started with 15 in 2000 (actually 16) and musical performances started from 2005 (actually 2010 on the graph, though data points were zero prior). Overall, the response fulfills the requirements of Task 1 reasonably well.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response is arranged coherently with a clear overall progression divided into an introduction, an overview paragraph, and body paragraphs detailing specific trends. Cohesive devices are used to signal shifts between categories, such as 'In addition', 'Later', and 'In contrast'. However, referencing and cohesion are sometimes faulty or mechanical, as seen in awkward transitions like 'before growing up at around 52' or 'While amateur dramatics slowly grew up around 28 in 2005 before dropping at 5 in 2020', which creates a sentence fragment error. Paragraphing is present and logically structured, but the overall flow can be disjointed due to phrasing issues.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, attempting less common items related to data trends such as 'proportion', 'upward trend', 'fluctuated', and 'gradually fell'. However, there are numerous lexical, spelling, and word-choice errors throughout the text, including typos and misused words (e.g., 'he' instead of 'The', 'perticipants', 'up ward', 'flactuated', 'dtamatics', 'minimally rise' instead of 'minimal rise', 'growing up' instead of 'growing'). These errors reflect a Band 6 level where vocabulary is adequate to convey meaning, but inaccurate word forms and spelling slips are noticeable.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, utilizing relative clauses and time-marker prepositional phrases. However, control over grammar and sentence structure is inconsistent. There are several noticeable grammatical errors, such as missing subject-verb agreement or incomplete syntactic structures (e.g., 'While amateur dramatics slowly grew up around 28 in 2005 before dropping at 5 in 2020', which lacks a main clause). Other errors include missing articles ('film is the accounted largest proportion') and awkward preposition usage ('flactuations from 35 to 36 time period'). These errors occasionally impede smooth reading, placing the response firmly at Band 5.5 to 6.0.
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