Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
In this graph gives the participants information,reporting and features about the activities at social centre in Melbourn, Australia in the time 2000 to 2020.
In the 2000, 15% people participate table tennis and it is increase 2005 to 2010. After 2010 they increase around 55. On the other hand music performances are the lowest point around 2005 to 2020. However, film club increas day by day 65% participants involve in the club and it has face up and downs in the end 2020.
Similarly, Amateur dramatics have 25% individuas and after 2005 it was decline day by day. May be people were not intrested anymore. In the 2020 number of participants around 5%.
At the end, Martial arts has a balanced like in 2000 it have 35% participants and it was face up and dpwn conditions. In the last 2020 its around 46% individuals. Musical performances starts in 2005 and it has around 12% participants it increas little bit and 2020it has 19% people.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The student attempts to report the main features of the graph, mentioning several activities such as table tennis, film club, and amateur dramatics. However, there are significant inaccuracies in reporting the data, such as confusing percentages with absolute numbers of participants and misreading figures (e.g., stating table tennis started at 15% in 2000 and reached around 55, or that film club had 65%). There is also no clear overall overview provided to summarise the main trends across the period. Consequently, the response falls into the Band 4 descriptor range as the information is frequently inaccurate or inadequately presented.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The text is divided into paragraphs, which provides a basic framework, but the logical progression and overall coherence are heavily disrupted by awkward linking expressions and vague referencing. Phrases like 'At the end' and repetitive sentence structures ('after 2005 it was decline day by day') make the flow mechanical and sometimes difficult to follow. Cohesive devices are either misused or overused, and the relationships between ideas within paragraphs lack clear logical sequencing, corresponding to a Band 4 level.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, relying on simple terms like 'increase', 'decline', 'participants', and 'people'. There are frequent inappropriate word choices and collocations, such as 'balanced like' instead of 'fluctuated' or 'remained relatively stable', and 'face up and dpwn conditions'. Spelling and word formation errors also appear throughout the text (e.g., 'Melbourn', 'intrested', 'increas'). This lexical limitation restricts the response to a Band 4.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of simple and attempted complex sentences that contain frequent foundational errors. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'Amateur dramatics have', 'Martial arts has... it have'), incorrect verb tenses, and missing auxiliary verbs (e.g., 'it was decline', 'it is increase'). These persistent errors frequently strain the reader and obscure the intended meaning, placing the performance in Band 4.
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