Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graphs illustrate that the numbers of participants for different activities in a particular country Australia between 2000 and 2020.
Overall, the trend shows that film is the accounted largest proportion of perticipants from 2000 to 2020. In addition, table tennis and musical performances ended with a up ward trend . Martial arts flactuated all over the period . However, amateur dtamatics gradually fell.
In 2000 , film club was the largest participan group at around 65 and slightly fell at 60 in 2010, later climbed to approximately 65 in 2020. Table tennis started with 15 in 2000 and saw a minimally rise to 18 in 2010 before growing up at around 52 in 2020. Musical performances started from 2005 and gradually increased to 18 in 2020.
In contrast, Martial arts showed flactuations from 35 to 36 time period between 2000 and 2020. While amateur dramatics slowly grew up around 28 in 2005 before dropping at 5 in 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The response covers all the main features of the chart and attempts comparisons where relevant. The overview correctly identifies the film club as having the largest proportion overall, and highlights key trends such as the upward trajectory of table tennis and musical performances. While the details generally align with the visual data—such as the film club starting around 64 and finishing near 66, and table tennis rising significantly from 16 to 54—there are some slight inaccuracies in specific data reporting, for example stating table tennis started with '15' or describing musical performances as starting from 2005 when the graph shows zero participants in 2005 and the rise beginning by 2010. However, the overall task requirements are met, and the main trends are adequately summarised, placing this at Band 6.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response is organized into four paragraphs, providing a logical framework with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs detailing specific activities. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'Overall', 'In addition', and 'In contrast', which help guide the reader through the data. However, referencing and paragraphing can sometimes feel mechanical or slightly awkward, such as the abrupt grouping in the final body paragraph. Additionally, minor organizational issues within sentences, like 'ended with a up ward trend', detract slightly from the flow. Overall, the essay maintains a coherent structure with clear overall progression, fitting the Band 6 descriptor.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, with appropriate topic-specific terms like 'participants', 'activities', 'trend', and activity names from the prompt. However, there are numerous lexical and spelling errors throughout the text, such as 'perticipants', 'up ward', 'flactuated', 'dtamatics', and 'minimally rise' instead of 'minimal rise'. The writer attempts some less common vocabulary items (e.g., 'proportion', 'approximately'), but the frequency of spelling slips and word-form inaccuracies restricts the score to Band 5.5, as these errors occasionally require the reader to slow down.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, utilizing relative clauses and comparative structures. However, grammatical accuracy is inconsistent. There are several noticeable errors, including missing prepositions or incorrect articles in the opening sentence ('in a particular country Australia'), tense confusion or awkward verb phrases ('grew up around 28', 'dropping at 5'), and typos such as 'was the largest participan group'. Punctuation and sentence structure errors are frequent enough to cause some difficulty for the reader, which aligns closely with the Band 5.5 descriptors.
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