Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graphs illustrate the numbers of participants for different activities in a particular country Australia between 2000 and 2020.
Overall, the trend shows that film accounted for the largest proportion of participants from 2000 to 2020. In addition, table tennis and musical performances ended with an upward trend . Martial arts fluctuated all over the period . However, amateur dramatics gradually fell.
In 2000 , film club was the largest participant group at around 65 and slightly fell at 60 in 2010, later climbed to approximately 65 in 2020. Table tennis started with 15 in 2000 and saw a minimal rise to 18 in 2010 before surging to around 52 in 2020. Musical performances started from 2005 and gradually increased to 18 in 2020.
In contrast, Martial arts showed fluctuations from 35 to 36 time period between 2000 and 2020. While amateur dramatics slowly grew to around 28 in 2005 before dropping at 5 in 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0
The student addresses all parts of the task by reporting the main features, trends, and making relevant comparisons across the given time period. An overview is provided, noting the dominance of the film club and the general trajectories of other activities. Key data points are cited accurately, such as the film club starting at around 65 and ending at 66, and table tennis surging to around 52 in 2020. However, there is a minor inaccuracy in the overview regarding musical performances, as they did not start until 2005 rather than 2000, though this is partially corrected in the body paragraphs. Overall, the response effectively covers the visual data, fulfilling the requirements for Band 6.5 to 7.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response is logically organized with a clear overall progression. It begins with an introductory paragraph, followed by an overview, and then divides the body into logical groupings by activity trends. Cohesive devices such as 'overall', 'in addition', 'however', and 'in contrast' are used to connect ideas, although some transitions feel slightly mechanical. Paragraphing is utilized appropriately to separate different groups of data. While referencing is generally clear, occasional awkwardness in sentence linking prevents the response from reaching a higher band. Coherence and cohesion comfortably meet the criteria for Band 6.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary suitable for the task, successfully incorporating terms like 'proportion', 'fluctuated', 'surging', and 'gradually fell'. There are some attempts at less common vocabulary with varying degrees of accuracy; for instance, 'largest participant group' is understandable but slightly imprecise. A few minor word choice issues occur, such as writing 'film' instead of 'film club' in the overview. Spelling is generally accurate throughout the text. The lexical range is sufficient for the task and aligns well with Band 6.0 descriptors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5
The writer employs a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, including subordinate clauses and temporal markers (e.g., 'while amateur dramatics slowly grew... before dropping'). There are several grammatical errors and awkward phrasings, such as missing prepositions or incorrect verb forms ('fell at 60', 'dropping at 5'), and punctuation slips around commas. Despite these errors, communication is rarely impeded, and the majority of simple sentences are accurate. This performance reflects the characteristics of Band 6.0 in grammatical range and accuracy.
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