Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The line graphs illustrate the numbers of participants for different activities in a particular country Australia, between 2000 and 2020.
Overall, the trend shows that film accounted for the largest proportion of participants from 2000 to 2020. In addition, table tennis and musical performances ended with an upward trend. Martial arts fluctuated all over the period . However, amateur dramatics gradually fell.
In 2000 , film club was the largest participant group to around 65 and slightly fell at 60 in 2010, later climbed to approximately 65 in 2020. Table tennis started with 15 in 2000 and saw a minimal rise to 18 in 2010 before surging to around 52 in 2020. Musical performances started from 2005 and gradually increased to 18 in 2020.
In contrast, Martial arts showed fluctuations from 35 to 36 time period between 2000 and 2020. While amateur dramatics slowly grew to around 28 in 2005 before dropping to 5 in 2020
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5
The student covers all parts of the task by reporting the main features and making relevant comparisons across the given time period. An overview is successfully provided, capturing the dominant status of the film club and the overall upward trends of table tennis and musical performances. Key data points are cited accurately, such as the film club starting around 65 and table tennis surging to around 52 in 2020. However, there are minor inaccuracies in some early data points, such as stating table tennis started with 15 in 2000 when the chart shows 16, and some descriptions of fluctuations are slightly over-generalized. Nevertheless, the main trends are clearly identified and supported with appropriate data from the visual. Overall, the task is addressed well.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0
The response is logically organised and easy to follow. It begins with an introductory sentence, moves to a clear overall summary paragraph, and then breaks down the specific data points into logical body paragraphs. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate general trends from specific figures. Cohesive devices are used adequately, such as 'Overall', 'In addition', and 'In contrast', although some transitions could be smoother or more varied. Referencing is generally clear, though minor mechanical errors in spacing and punctuation slightly disrupt the flow. The progression of information is logical throughout.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
The student demonstrates an adequate vocabulary range for the task, successfully attempting less common vocabulary items such as 'proportion', 'fluctuated', 'surging', and 'gradually fell'. However, there are occasional inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'film club was the largest participant group' instead of 'had the largest number of participants'. Spelling is generally accurate, but minor stylistic awkwardnesses occur. The lexical range is sufficient to convey the main features and comparisons, allowing the message to be communicated without difficulty, fitting a solid Band 6 level.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5
The student uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, incorporating clauses of time and contrast effectively. There is good control over past tense narrative structures required for historical data. However, a few grammatical errors and awkward phrasing persist, such as 'Martial arts showed fluctuations from 35 to 36 time period' and a missing full stop at the very end of the text. While these errors do not impede communication, they prevent the text from achieving a higher score. Complex structures are attempted with mixed success.
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