Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graphs illustrate the numbers of participants for different activities in a particular country Australia, between 2000 and 2020.
Overall, the trend shows that film accounted for the largest proportion of participants from 2000 to 2020. In addition, table tennis and musical performances ended with an upward trend. Martial arts fluctuated all over the period. However, amateur dramatics gradually fell.
In 2000 , film club was the largest participant group to around 65 and slightly fell to 60 in 2010, later climbed to approximately 65 in 2020. Table tennis started with 15 in 2000 and saw a minimal rise to 18 in 2010 before surging to around 52 in 2020. Musical performances started from 2005 and gradually increased to 18 in 2020.
In contrast, martial arts showed fluctuations from 35 to 36 over the 2000 and 2020. While amateur dramatics slowly grew to around 28 in 2005 before dropping to 5 in 2020
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0
The student successfully covers all parts of the task by reporting the main features, trends, and comparisons of the five activities shown in the chart. An overview is provided, highlighting the film club as the largest group and noting the general trajectories of table tennis, musical performances, martial arts, and amateur dramatics. Specific data points are cited to support the trends, such as the film club starting around 65 and ending at approximately 66, and table tennis surging to around 52 in 2020. However, there are minor inaccuracies in naming the country context ("in a particular country Australia") which slightly misreads the prompt's focus on a social centre in Melbourne. Overall, the task is well-addressed with relevant and accurate data selection.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response has a clear overall progression and logical arrangement, divided into an introduction, an overview paragraph, and two body paragraphs detailing specific trends. Cohesive devices are used reasonably well, such as "Overall", "In addition", and "In contrast". However, paragraphing and referencing can occasionally feel slightly mechanical or abrupt, and there are some awkward transitions between sentences. For instance, the transition from the overview into the detailed body paragraphs lacks a seamless flow. Nevertheless, the logical sequence of information is maintained throughout the text.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, attempting some less common lexical items and descriptive verbs such as "surging", "fluctuated", and "gradually fell". However, there are noticeable word choice and collocation issues, such as writing "the trend shows that film accounted for the largest proportion" instead of "film club", and awkward phrasing like "largest participant group to around 65". There are also minor omissions and slight inaccuracies, but these do not impede overall communication. A wider variety of precise phrasing would be needed for a higher band.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The writing demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, with attempts at subordinate clauses and comparative structures. There are several grammatical errors and punctuation slips throughout the text, such as extra spacing ("2000 ,"), missing prepositions or words (e.g., "from 35 to 36 over the 2000 and 2020"), and an incomplete final sentence ("While amateur dramatics slowly grew to around 28 in 2005 before dropping to 5 in 2020"). Despite these errors, the meaning remains largely clear and communication is not seriously impeded by the grammatical lapses.
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