Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The line graph illustrates the number of people participanting in five different activities at a social centre in melbourne between 2000 and 2020.

Overall, most activities saw an increase in participation over 20 year periods,with the film club remaining the most popular amateur dramatics was the only activity that experienced a significant decline fall.

The film club started strong with about 65 participants and it decreased slightly to approximately 60% in 2010.before recoverd increase modorately and finished with around 65.

In 2000, there was 35 participants in martial arts group,which decreased slightly to 30 in 2005.after that it surged slightly to around 36 in 2010.

Then it flutuated in the next 10 years and finished with approximately 35. Amateur dramatics,starting with 25,increased slightly to 28 % in 2005. It was decreased dramaticaly to 5 people in 2020.

Table tennis started with 15 people,which remained almost same in the next 10 years.Then,it increaseddrasticaly to 55 in 2020. Musical performances,starting with 0, It was rose notably to around15 people in 2010. After that that it comtinued its u

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

The response covers all parts of the task and presents a clear overview of the main trends. The student correctly identifies the film club as the most popular activity and highlights the contrasting trends between amateur dramatics and table tennis. Key data points are generally accurate, such as noting that table tennis rose drastically to around 55 in 2020. However, there are some inaccuracies in data reporting, such as stating that 'there was 35 participants' in 2000 for martial arts (which started at 36) and minor misreadings of percentages instead of raw participant numbers (e.g., '60% in 2010'). Despite these minor issues, the selection and reporting of main features are sufficient for a Band 6.0.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a clear overall arrangement and attempts to organise information logically by activity and time period. Paragraphing is used, though the sentences tend to run together or trail off abruptly at the end ('After that that it comtinued its u'). Cohesive devices are used, but referencing is sometimes mechanical or faulty, and punctuation errors disrupt the flow. For instance, sentences are occasionally fused together without proper spacing or punctuation (e.g., 'over 20 year periods,with the film club', '2010.before recoverd increase modorately'). While the progression of ideas is generally understandable, these cohesive and mechanical flaws place the response solidly at Band 5.5.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully attempting less common items such as 'surged', 'fluctuated', and 'dramatically'. However, there are frequent word-choice and spelling errors that impede precision and lower the lexical score. Examples include 'participanting' instead of participating, 'recoverd increase modorately', and using percentage signs ('60%', '28 %') when describing raw participant numbers. Furthermore, some terms are misused or awkwardly collocated. Because the vocabulary range is sufficient to convey the main points despite noticeable errors, this meets the criteria for Band 5.5.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, incorporating relative clauses ('activities that experienced') and introductory prepositional phrases. However, control over grammar and punctuation is weak, with frequent errors that cause difficulty for the reader. Notable issues include subject-verb agreement errors ('there was 35 participants'), missing articles, tense inconsistencies, and fragments (e.g., 'Musical performances,starting with 0, It was rose notably'). Punctuation and capitalization are also erratic, notably missing proper nouns like 'melbourne'. Due to the frequency of grammatical errors and faulty complex structures, a Band 5.0 is appropriate.

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