Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The graph tracks the the number of participations for several activities at a social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the time frame 2000 to 2020.

Overall, it is clear that the film club had highest number of participants throughout the 20 years. On the other hand, the amateur dramatics had a significant decline becoming the club with least amount of participants by the end of given time period.

The musical performances had zero participants in 2005, though it increased at a decreasing rate ending at almost 20 participants by the end of 2020. In general, the film club had a stable amount of participants throughout the 20 years, but there was a slight decline from almost 63 participants in 2000 to 60 in 2010. Moreover, the number of participants increased to round about 63 at the end of 2020.

The table tennis had almost 17 participants in 2000 and it slightly increased to 20 in 2005. Later after being consistent for five years the number of participants surged to more than 50 by the end of 2020. Although the martial arts club had fluctuation in number of participants but it remained stable by the end of 2020 to almost 37 participants. The amateur dramatics nearly 26 number of participants in 2000 before increasing slightly to 30 in 2005. In 2010, both table tennis and amateur dramatics had same number of participants. Additionally, the amateur dramatics plunged to almost 10 participants in 2020 which is round about six times less than film club.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

The response covers all parts of the task well, providing an overview and selecting key features and comparisons. The writer successfully reports the main trends, such as the dominance of the film club, the dramatic fall of amateur dramatics, and the significant growth in table tennis and musical performances. There are minor inaccuracies in data reporting (for example, stating that amateur dramatics started at 26 and went to 30 in 2005, when the chart shows it went from 26 to 28, and stating martial arts ended at 37 instead of 36), but these are slight and do not detract from a clear overall summary. The response satisfies all requirements for a Band 7 level.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response is logically organised with a clear progression throughout. It begins with an introductory paragraph, followed by an overall summary statement, and then details specific trends in subsequent paragraphs. Cohesive devices are used reasonably well, such as 'On the other hand', 'In general', and 'Moreover', though referencing is occasionally a bit mechanical. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate ideas. While it meets the criteria for Band 7, minor lapses in cohesion prevent it from reaching a higher band.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

The student uses a sufficient range of vocabulary for the task, attempting less common items and phrases such as 'significant decline', 'surged', 'fluctuation', and 'plunged'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'number of participations' instead of 'number of participants', and awkward phrasing like 'the amateur dramatics nearly 26 number of participants'. Spelling is generally good, but the lexical control has occasional lapses that place it firmly at Band 6.5, rounded to 6.5.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The writer uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, demonstrating some control over clause structures with subordinating conjunctions like 'although' and 'after being consistent for five years'. However, there are notable grammatical errors and awkward phrasings, such as missing verbs ('The amateur dramatics nearly 26 number of participants'), redundant words ('tracks the the number'), and occasional article errors. These errors do not impede communication, but they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score than 6.0.

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