Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-25
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.5)
The given multi-line graph tracks the number of participants who took park in five different activities at social centre in Melbourne, Australia for a total period of twenty years from 2000 to 2020.
Overall, the film club retained it position as the most participated activity throughout these years. A rise could be seen in number of participants taking part in table tennis and musical performances. Additionally, number of participants taking part in martial arts remained steady. However, a decline was seen in number of participants of the amateur dramatics.
Film club remained the most dominant activity for the twenty-year period. It experienced a slight fall in 2010 and a steady rise till 2020 which brought its number to approximately 67 participants. Martial arts remained steady despite some minor fluctuations. The most drastic rise was seen at number of participants of table tennis after the year 2010, at around 19 participants, to around 55 participants in 2020.
There were no participants for musical performances till 2005 after which a steady rise was seen till 2020, at around 19 participants. Ultimately, the amateur dramatics was the only activity that declined. After reaching a peak at 2005, at 29 participants, a gradual decline was seen till 2020 bringing number of participants down to 8.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5
The student covers all parts of the task well, providing a clear overview and highlighting key trends and comparisons across the five activities. The introduction correctly identifies the scope of the graph, and the body paragraphs select relevant data points, such as the dominance of the film club and the significant upward trajectory of table tennis. While a minor grammatical slip occurs in the opening sentence ('who took park'), the data reporting is accurate and well-supported by figures from the chart, meeting the expectations for a Band 7.0 performance.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5
The response is logically organized with a clear overall progression. The essay begins with an introductory statement, followed by a distinct overview paragraph, and then detailed body paragraphs that group information logically by activity and trend. Cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'Additionally', 'However', and 'Ultimately' are used appropriately to guide the reader through the data, ensuring smooth transitions between sentences and paragraphs. Paragraphing is used effectively, resulting in a cohesive piece of writing that clearly meets the Band 7.0 descriptors.
Lexical Resource: Band 6.0
The student demonstrates an adequate to good range of vocabulary suitable for an academic task 1 response. Phrases like 'retained its position', 'steady rise', 'minor fluctuations', and 'gradual decline' show a solid command of describing graphical trends. There are occasional slight awkwardness or minor lexical inaccuracies, such as 'most participated activity' instead of 'most popular activity', but these do not impede communication. The vocabulary is sufficient to allow some precision, supporting a solid Band 6.5 or 7.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0
The writer uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, including relative clauses and prepositional phrases, with generally good control. There are some minor grammatical errors, such as 'who took park' (instead of 'took part') and missing articles ('at social centre' instead of 'at a social centre'), but complex structures are attempted and often accurate. Punctuation is sound, and errors do not impede communication, placing the response comfortably within the Band 6.5 to 7.0 range.
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