Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-25
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph illustrates the number of participants for different activities at one social center in Melbourne, Austraila between 2000 and 2020.
Overall, the most prefered activity by participants was film club over the period. Furthermore, musical performances and table tennis had an incline; whereas amateur dramatics had a decline over the period.
A detailed analysis of graph shows that, during 2000 to 2010, flim club had a slight decline from 65 to 60 participants then this figure rebounded to 67 participants in 2020. On the other hand we can observe a slight decline from 35 to 31 participants during 2000 and 2005 then this figure flucuate between 31 and 35 till 2020.
In contrast, amateur dramatic had an negligible incline from 27 to 28 participants during 2000 and 2005 before it fell sharply to 7 participants in 2020. Whereas table tennis had an slight increase from 15 to 20 participants from 2000 to 2005 then it remained constant
till 2010 and skyrocketed to 53 participants in 2020. Similarly, musicial performances remained constant at 0 till 2005, before it had asignificant rise to 11 in 2010 then it rose s
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The student successfully addresses all parts of the task by selecting and reporting the main features of the line graph, providing an adequate overview and making relevant comparisons across the five activities between 2000 and 2020. The key trends are identified, such as the film club remaining the most popular overall, table tennis experiencing a significant increase, and amateur dramatics declining. However, there are minor inaccuracies in reading specific data points, such as stating the film club started at 65 when it was around 64, and the writing cuts off abruptly at the end while discussing musical performances. Despite the incomplete final sentence, the overall reporting covers the main features effectively, earning a band score of 6.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response is arranged coherently with a logical overall progression. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the introduction, overview, and body paragraphs detailing specific trends. Cohesive devices are employed to connect ideas, such as 'Furthermore', 'whereas', and 'On the other hand', though referencing and transitions can occasionally feel slightly mechanical. Paragraphing is adequate, but the abrupt ending due to running out of text affects the final cohesion. Overall, the organization is clear and easy to follow, supporting a solid band 6.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully attempting less common items and functional language to describe trends, such as 'incline', 'decline', 'rebounded', 'flucuate', and 'skyrocketed'. However, there are several spelling and word-choice errors, including 'prefered', 'flim', 'flucuate' (instead of fluctuate), 'dramatic' (instead of dramatics), and 'musicial'. These errors do not seriously impede communication, but they reflect limitations that prevent the score from reaching a higher band. The vocabulary is minimally sufficient to convey the intended meaning.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5
The student uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures throughout the response, incorporating clauses of contrast and time effectively (e.g., 'whereas amateur dramatics had a decline over the period' and 'before it fell sharply'). There are several grammatical errors and typos, such as missing articles ('graph shows that, during 2000 to 2010, flim club...'), tense inconsistencies in the incomplete final sentence ('before it had asignificant rise to 11 in 2010 then it rose s'), and spelling mistakes. These errors rarely impede overall comprehension, though they show a lower level of accuracy in complex forms.
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