Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-25
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
From 2000 to 2005, trends have significantly changed but film club has not shown much variation. It means that people had always remain interested in participating in that area of activities. From 2000 to 2005, not a single person participated in musical activity but the number started increasing from 2005 and increased upto 10-20 people. Likewise, people in Table tennis were nearly from 10-20 in the period of first 10 years but the count increased significantly and reached the range of 50-60 people by 2020. On the other hand Dramatics was at its peak from 2000 to 2005 but faced a huge decline. The number decreaded from 25 something to less than 10. Martial arts and film club did not vary much however, all the other clubs showed a huge change. In short, interests of people from 2000 to 2020 have changed in an unexpected manner.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum length requirement of 150 words, standing at 146 words, which negatively impacts Task Achievement. Furthermore, there are several misinterpretations of the visual data. For example, the student claims that 'Dramatics was at its peak from 2000 to 2005', whereas the graph shows it was actually at its highest point in 2000 at around 26 and declined steadily thereafter. Similarly, the overview contains a factual contradiction, initially stating that trends significantly changed but then noting 'Martial arts and film club did not vary much'. While the main features like the rise of table tennis and musical performances are touched upon, the lack of a clear, well-developed overview and the length penalty restrict the score.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The essay lacks proper paragraphing, presented as a single block of text, which significantly hinders Coherence and Cohesion. The logical progression is somewhat weak; ideas jump between different activities and time periods without smooth transitions (e.g., 'It means that people had always remain interested...'). Although basic cohesive devices such as 'Likewise' and 'On the other hand' are employed, referencing is occasionally imprecise ('that area of activities'). Overall, the structural organisation is mechanical and lacks the clear paragraph division expected in an Academic Task 1 response.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The lexical range is somewhat limited and repetitive. The student relies heavily on basic vocabulary such as 'increased', 'changed', 'number', and 'people'. There are noticeable inappropriate word choices and collocations, such as 'musical activity' instead of 'musical performances' or 'participants in musical performances'. Additionally, spelling and word form errors occur, such as 'decreaded' instead of 'decreased'. Less common vocabulary is attempted with limited success ('unexpected manner'), meaning the vocabulary is only minimally adequate for the task.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The student uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but grammatical control is inconsistent. There are several tense and verb form errors throughout the text, such as 'trends have significantly changed' combined with past time markers, 'people had always remain interested' (incorrect auxiliary and base verb), and 'people in Table tennis were nearly from 10-20'. Punctuation is generally basic, and while some complex structures are attempted, they frequently contain errors that cause some difficulty for the reader.
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