Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The graph illustatres the information about the participants involved in various activities at a social centre in a city of Australia between 2000 to 2020.

Overall the highest number of participants have shown interest in film club throughout the period. Musical performances had least number of people in 2005, but the trend increases over the time. In addition, very few people was interested in Amateur dramatics.

The film club is the most joined activity, around 65 contestents in 2000 and continues till 2010 it reduced to 60. However, the club gains its popularity again and reaches to almost 70 in 2020. At the beginning, well under 40 people joined Martial arts. The number changes over the years from 30 to around 40 on and off. It was near to 40 in 2020.

In year between 2000 to 2005 the Amateur dramatics had about 30 participants but then it faced a dramatic fall having under 10 individuals only in 2020. Whereas, the interest for table tennis among people has increased tremendously from only 17 people in 2000 to around 60 in 2020. The interest in Musical performances have started to developed in 2005 and reaches to 15 participants in 2010 and 20 in 2020.

In Conclusion, an increase has been observed over the years in all activities except Amateur dramatics.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

The response successfully covers all the key features of the graph, presenting an adequate overview and reporting data for the five activities across the 2000-2020 period. The student correctly identifies the film club as the most popular activity and amateur dramatics as the one experiencing a significant decline, alongside the rising trends in table tennis and musical performances. However, there are some minor data inaccuracies and over-generalisations; for instance, the writer states that musical performances started in 2005, whereas the graph indicates zero participants in 2000 and 2005, with data only appearing from 2010 onwards. Additionally, some figures are slightly approximated or loosely reported (e.g., 'around 65 contestants' in 2000). Nevertheless, the core requirements of Task 1 are met, and all parts of the visual data are addressed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The essay is structured logically into four distinct paragraphs, starting with an introduction and overview, followed by body paragraphs grouping the activities, and a brief concluding sentence. Cohesive devices are used to connect ideas, such as 'Overall', 'In addition', 'However', and 'Whereas'. However, referencing and paragraph cohesion sometimes feel a bit mechanical or abrupt. For example, the transition between sentences within the body paragraphs can be disjointed, and the single-sentence conclusion is overly brief. Paragraphing is present and generally appropriate, but the internal logical flow between sentences occasionally falters.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The student demonstrates an adequate vocabulary range for the task, attempting some less common items such as 'tremendously', 'dramatic fall', and 'participants'. However, there are several lexical errors and inappropriate word choices throughout the text. For instance, 'illustatres' (spelling error), 'contestents' (spelling and inappropriate collocation for social centre attendees), and 'least number of people' instead of 'the fewest'. Furthermore, phrases like 'the trend increases over the time' and 'the interest in Musical performances have started to developed' show persistent issues with word formation and collocation that slightly hinder precise communication.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The text displays a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but control over grammar and punctuation is inconsistent. There are several noticeable grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('Musical performances had least number', 'the interest... have started to developed', 'very few people was interested'), missing articles ('in year between'), and awkward phrasing ('In year between 2000 to 2005 the Amateur dramatics had'). Complex sentences are attempted, but they frequently contain errors that cause some minor difficulty for the reader, though communication is not severely impeded.

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