Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-26
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The graph illustrates the information about the numbers of participants for different kind of activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia over the period from 2000 to 2020.
Overall, Film club had contains the greater number of participants however, amateur dramatics had least number of partcipants. Meanwhile, participants in martial arts almost remained constant.
Consequently, participants in table tennis suddenly rised from 2010 to 2020. But as for the martial arts participants were almost remain constant. However, in 2000, participants in musical performances were zero but from 2005, it sddenly rised and then gradully increased. Moreover, amateur dramatics participants were gradually declined from 2005 to 2020. Film club had higher number of participants from the beginning and participants almost remained constant. It was not experienced the big change. Table tennis and amateur dramatics experienced the same number of participants in 2010. Amateur dramatics and martial arts almost experienced the same number of participants in 2025.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The response successfully covers all parts of the task by selecting and reporting the main features of the line graph. The student identifies overall trends, such as the Film club maintaining the highest participation and amateur dramatics experiencing a steep decline, while also highlighting the notable rise in table tennis. An overview is present, and key comparisons are made across the five activities. However, there is a factual error in the concluding sentence regarding the year 2025, which does not appear on the graph. Overall, the task is adequately addressed, meeting the requirements for a Band 6.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response has a coherent overall arrangement and attempts to group information logically, starting with an overview followed by detailed body sentences. However, the progression is somewhat disjointed due to abrupt transitions and repetitive sentence structures ('participants in...'). Cohesive devices are used mechanically ('Consequently', 'Meanwhile', 'Moreover'), and referencing is occasionally unclear. Paragraphing is under-utilised, as the entire body of the response is compressed into two blocks. This places the performance firmly in the Band 5.5 to 6.0 range, warranting a Band 6.0 for clear overall communication despite mechanical cohesion.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully incorporating terms related to graphical trends such as 'constant', 'declined', and 'increased'. However, there are notable spelling and word choice errors, including 'rised' instead of 'rose', 'gradully', 'sddenly', and 'contains' instead of 'maintained'. Less common vocabulary is attempted with limited success, and some expressions feel unnatural. These lexical limitations and errors are noticeable but do not severely impede communication, aligning with the Band 5.5 descriptors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but control over grammar is inconsistent. There are frequent grammatical and mechanical errors, such as 'Film club had contains', 'participants in martial arts almost remained constant', and the tense confusion in 'It was not experienced the big change'. Additionally, referencing a future year ('2025') creates a tense mismatch. While simple sentences are generally understandable, errors in complex structures and verb forms cause occasional difficulty for the reader, placing the response at Band 5.0.
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