Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The line graph illustrates information on the numbers of participants for various activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Overall there are lot of activities more popular among partcipants in 2020 than 2000. However amateur dramatics shows rapid decline during this period. Film club ,martial arts, table tennis , musical performances were the more popular activities among the participants.

Initially, table tennis was increased steadily between 2000 and 2010 although after that it increased significantly during next decade. It accounted for approximately 55. In addition anyone like to musical performances between 2000 and 2005 . However in 2020 it reached peak .

Furthermore , martial arts was fluctuated during this two decades. It reached peak in 2010 and it accounted for 40. The number of participants who like to table tennis in 2010 was equal the number of participants who like to amateur dramatics .It accounted for 20

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The student attempts to address the prompt by summarising the main features of the line graph, noting general trends such as the popularity of the film club and the decline of amateur dramatics. However, the response contains several inaccuracies and misinterpretations of the data. For instance, the writer claims that musical performances were popular between 2000 and 2005, whereas the chart shows zero participants during that period. Furthermore, the description of table tennis and martial arts contains confusing or incorrect figures. The overview is overly simplistic, and the data selection lacks precision, leading to a partial and somewhat flawed coverage of the task requirements.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response is structured into four paragraphs, attempting an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs. However, the logical progression is frequently disrupted by poor cohesion and abrupt transitions. Cohesive devices are misused or clumsy, such as 'although after that' and 'In addition anyone like to'. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal flow within paragraphs is weak. Referencing is sometimes unclear, particularly when discussing specific years and categories, making the relationships between ideas difficult to follow at times.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is fairly basic and repetitive, with frequent word-choice and collocation errors. Examples include 'numbers of participants for various activities', 'lot of activities', and 'anyone like to musical performances'. The student attempts some less common vocabulary such as 'significantly', 'fluctuated', and 'rapid decline', but these are often paired with inaccurate prepositions or awkward phrasing. Spelling is generally acceptable, but lexical control is insufficient to achieve a higher band.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but control over grammar is weak. There are frequent errors in tense usage, subject-verb agreement, and sentence construction, such as 'table tennis was increased steadily', 'martial arts was fluctuated', and 'was equal the number'. Articles and prepositions are also frequently misused. These errors occasionally cause difficulty for the reader and prevent the formation of error-free complex sentences.

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