Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The line graph provides the information about participation of people in various activities at a social centre in Melbourne from 2000 to 2020.

Overall, It illustrates that film club remained the most popular, and the participation in table tennis increased thrice in the recent years. While, the number of participants in musical performances and amateur dramatics were relatively small and martial arts had a descent participation.

The number of participation in the film club and martial arts remained a quite stable throughout the period of [redacted phone] which was approximately 65 for the film club and 35 for the martial arts.

Table tennis and muscial performance's engagement among the people significantly increased from 2000 to 2020. Table tennis participants number surged overwhelmingly from 16 in 2000 to 54 in 2020, while muscial performance had 20 participation in 2020 since its start in 2005. However, peole are losing their intreset in amateur dramatics, hence the participants' count dropped from 25 to 5 in the given twenty years.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

The student covers all parts of the task well, providing an overview of the main trends and selecting key data points to compare. The opening summary correctly identifies the film club as the most popular activity and highlights the significant growth in table tennis. Specific figures are generally reported accurately, such as the film club remaining around 65 and table tennis surging from 16 to 54. However, there are a few minor inaccuracies or vague approximations, such as stating musical performance had '20 participation in 2020' (the actual value is closer to 18) and 'dropped from 25 to 5' for amateur dramatics (it started at 26). Nonetheless, the overall response addresses the prompt fully and presents a well-supported overview, aligning well with the Band 7 descriptor.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response exhibits a clear logical organisation and progression throughout. Information is divided into logical paragraphs, starting with an introduction and overall statement, followed by body paragraphs grouping stable activities versus those showing significant change. Cohesive devices are used reasonably well to link ideas, such as 'While', 'However', and 'hence'. However, there are minor cohesion and referencing flaws, such as the awkward transition 'While, the number of participants...' starting a new sentence prematurely, and slight mechanical usage of cohesive markers. Paragraphing is used sufficiently and appropriately, maintaining a coherent overall structure that meets the criteria for a Band 6.5 or solid 7.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The student demonstrates an adequate and flexible range of vocabulary suitable for an academic task, attempting less common lexical items such as 'participants', 'surged overwhelmingly', 'relatively small', and 'engagement'. There are occasional word choice and collocation inaccuracies, for instance, 'descent participation' instead of 'decent participation', 'muscial performance' (spelling error), and 'participants number' instead of 'number of participants'. Despite these minor errors and spelling slips, the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the intended meaning with good precision in most places, fitting comfortably into the Band 6.0 to 6.5 range.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The writer uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, including relative clauses and comparative forms (e.g., 'which was approximately 65 for the film club' and 'Table tennis participants number surged overwhelmingly from 16 in 2000 to 54 in 2020'). There are several grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'The number of participation in...' (instead of 'participation'), 'remained a quite stable' (unnecessary article), and punctuation issues involving unnecessary commas (e.g., 'While, the number...'). While these errors do not impede communication, they persist frequently enough to prevent the response from reaching Band 7, placing it firmly at Band 6.0.

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