Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The graph below illustrates information on number of participants for various activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia during the years between 2000 to 2020.
In 2000, the highest number of participants partcipated in the film club activity by approximately 65 members and the play start falling till 2010 and again started increasing until 2020.
The lowest number of participants recorded in the activity is table tennis. I think there are no musical performances activity in 2000. In contrast, the Martial arts activity has dcreased in 2005 and again raised in 2010 and there up and down falls till 2020.
Amateur dramatics has started with 28 participants and there is slight increase in 2005 and it become rapidly fallen every year until 2020 The table tennis activity started with 18 members and it is slightly increased to 20 and become stable in 2010 and it continuous to inc
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarise the main features of the line graph, noting trends for several activities such as film club and table tennis. However, there are significant issues with data accuracy and interpretation. For instance, the writer states 'I think there are no musical performances activity in 2000', which is informal and conversational ('I think'). Furthermore, the response is incomplete, cutting off abruptly at the end ('it continuous to inc'), and it fails to meet the minimum length requirement of 150 words by being one word short. The overview is weak, and the presentation of data lacks a cohesive, well-structured selection of key trends. These deficiencies place the task achievement in the band 5 range.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The organisation of the text is weak and disjointed. The response consists of a series of short, choppy sentences and paragraphs that lack clear overall progression. Paragraphing is not used effectively to separate different trends or groups of activities. Cohesive devices are minimal or misused (e.g., 'In contrast, the Martial arts activity has dcreased...'). The abrupt ending ('it continuous to inc') further disrupts the flow and cohesion of the writing. While some logical links are attempted, the overall arrangement is faulty and mechanical, reflecting band 5 descriptors.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is generally basic and repetitive, with frequent reliance on simple terms like 'increase', 'decrease', and 'activity'. There are also instances of informal or inappropriate phrasing, such as 'the play start falling' and 'I think there are no...'. Spelling errors are present, including 'partcipated' and 'dcreased'. Although the vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey some basic information about the chart, the noticeable errors and limited range prevent the response from achieving a higher band score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but control over grammar is inconsistent. There are several grammatical errors and awkward constructions, such as 'the highest number of participants partcipated in the film club activity by approximately 65 members' (incorrect preposition and tautology) and 'it become rapidly fallen every year'. Tense usage is sometimes confused, and punctuation is basic. The frequent errors cause some difficulty for the reader and restrict the grammatical range to a level that aligns with band 5.
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