Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The graph illustrates the details on the numbers of contributor for different task in Australia from 2000 to 2020, at one social center in
Melbourne.
Overall, participants in flim club area were constantly high in numbers, however table tennis started the journey in small number but rose sharply in time. Furthermore, amateur dramatics were seen increased in number, later had a downfall.
To commence with, flim club in 2000 had 62% of participants , increasing upto 67% till 2020. The graph never decreased till 2 decades. Table tennis had 25% of players in 2000, in middle of 2010 t
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum length requirement of 150 words, stopping abruptly at 99 words. Consequently, the development of the response is incomplete, and important data trends are omitted. While the writer attempts an overview and mentions some features, such as the film club and table tennis, the incorrect reporting of units (using percentages instead of raw participant numbers, e.g., '62% of participants') demonstrates a misinterpretation of the visual data. Because the task is significantly under-length and incompletely addressed, the score is capped at Band 4.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The text is divided into an introduction and the beginnings of an overview and body paragraphs, but the response breaks off mid-sentence, preventing a complete logical structure from forming. Cohesive devices are attempted ('Overall', 'Furthermore', 'To commence with'), but referencing and progression are disrupted by the incomplete text and inaccurate data handling. Paragraphing is initiated but lacks full development due to the truncated nature of the writing.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is quite basic and repetitive, with noticeable inappropriate word choices, such as 'contributor' instead of 'participants' and 'flim club' (spelling error). The writer incorrectly treats the vertical axis data as percentages ('62% of participants'), which affects lexical precision. There are limited attempts at less common vocabulary ('downfall', 'sharply'), but overall the lexical range is restricted and strained.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple sentence structures and attempted complex forms. There are several grammatical errors and awkward phrasings, such as 'participants in flim club area were constantly high in numbers' and 'table tennis started the journey in small number'. Punctuation and preposition use are occasionally faulty, though the errors do not entirely obscure the intended meaning prior to the abrupt cutoff.
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