Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given line graph illustrates the number of participants in the five different activities such as Film club, Martial club, Amateur dramatics, Table tennis and Musical performances at social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period of two decades from 2000 to 2020.
Overall, Film club have the largest number of participants from the starting of decade to end of decade, whereas in 2000, the participants in Amateur dramatics were around 25 which were declined in upcoming years in 2020 they were only 5 participants.
In 2000, Table tennis is not popular at that time there is some around 15 participants were there, but in upcoming years this is the second highest grown activity. Martial arts is the activity which people love to do there were around 35 participants, whereas Film club is the only activity which have the more then 60 participants and it is the highest chosen activity in the upcoming decade. The Musical performances were not introduced at 2000 people showing interest in it from 2005. In next decade, Table tennis reached at 20 participants where as the Martial arts were show ground and reached at 40 participants and Amateur dramatics were show downfall people were not interested in it, it drops from 25 to 20, whereas the Film club is also show some fluctuation and reached at 60, but in next decade it has the largest number of participants around 78 and the second largest were Table tennis which were around more then 50, but the Amateur dramatics were not have many participants and were at 5, whereas the Martial arts were not have show much changes and reached at 38.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The student successfully covers all the main activities in the graph and attempts to provide an overview, noting key trends such as the dominance of the Film club and the dramatic drop in Amateur dramatics. However, there are some inaccuracies in data reporting. For instance, the student states that the Film club reached 'around 78' in the final decade, whereas the actual figure is closer to 66. Additionally, the overview is somewhat embedded in the second sentence rather than being clearly structured as a standalone introductory overview paragraph. Despite these data misreadings and structural shortcomings, the main trends are addressed, which places the response at Band 5.5 to 6.0. It is awarded a Band 6.0 as it successfully selects and reports the overall trends, even with minor data inaccuracies.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response has a coherent overall arrangement, but the paragraphing is poorly handled. The entire body of the report is clumped into one very long, dense paragraph following the introduction, which makes the progression difficult to follow. Cohesive devices are used, but they are often repetitive or mechanical, relying heavily on 'whereas' and 'in the upcoming years'. Referencing is occasionally unclear, such as shifting time markers ('in next decade', 'at 2000'). While the essay has a logical progression in terms of discussing the categories, the lack of appropriate paragraph breaks and over-reliance on simple connectors restricts the score to Band 5.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The student demonstrates an adequate vocabulary range for the task, attempting less common items such as 'fluctuation', 'downfall', and 'highest grown activity'. However, there are noticeable word choice and collocation errors, such as 'Martial club' instead of 'Martial arts', 'the participants were around 25 which were declined', and 'Martial arts were show ground'. Spelling is generally acceptable, but grammatical constraints on word forms (e.g., 'did not have show much changes') limit precision. Because the vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey the trends despite frequent inaccuracies, it meets the Band 5.0 descriptors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but control is inconsistent. There are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, and passive/active voice confusions (e.g., 'The Musical performances were not introduced at 2000', 'Table tennis is not popular at that time there is some around 15 participants were there', and 'Film club have the more then 60 participants'). Punctuation is also weak, with run-on sentences containing multiple clauses joined loosely by commas or conjunctions. These frequent errors cause occasional difficulty for the reader, aligning the writing with Band 5.0.
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