Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph illustrates the number of participants take place in numerous activities at one specific social center in Melbourne, Australia between 2000 and 2020. The activities includes martial arts, film club, amateur dramatics, table tennis and musical performances.
Overall, It is clear that the film club remained at top among the rest of activities, also, musical performances and amateur dramatics lag behind the rest of categories. Moreover, martial arts, table tennis and musical performances showed the most fluctuation from other activities.
To explain, The film club has roughly 75 participants in 2000 and it remained stable till 2020, showing no change over the period of twenty years. Martial arts remained the most fluctuated trend, starting from around 38 students in 2000, after significant variations it remained at from where it started at 38 students in 2020.
Additionally, The table tennis started at roughly 12 participants, remained stable till 2010, After 2010 the number of learners soared and have above 50 participants. While, Amateur dramatics has 25 participants in 2000 and the decreased trend till 2020 containing only few participants, it shows the same amount of learners as of table tennis in 2010. Musical performances has the negligible amount of learners in 2000, after 2005 its trend slightly elevated and has around 15 participants.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The student covers all parts of the task by selecting and reporting the main trends and making relevant comparisons across the five activities. An overview is successfully presented in the second paragraph, highlighting that the film club was the most popular and that musical performances and amateur dramatics lagged behind. However, there are some minor inaccuracies in reading the data, such as stating that the film club had 'roughly 75 participants in 2000' (when it was around 64) and claiming that martial arts showed the 'most fluctuation' when amateur dramatics and table tennis showed much more dramatic changes. Despite these minor data discrepancies, the response adequately addresses the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response is organized into logical paragraphs, beginning with an introduction, followed by an overview, and then two body paragraphs detailing specific trends. Cohesive devices are used to connect ideas, such as 'Overall', 'To explain', and 'Additionally'. However, some of the transitions and referencing are slightly mechanical or awkward, such as starting a body paragraph with 'To explain'. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate different categories of information.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully using terms like 'participants', 'fluctuation', 'stable', 'soared', and 'elevated'. However, there are noticeable word choice and collocation errors, such as 'number of participants take place' instead of 'taking part', 'remained at top' instead of 'remained at the top', and 'decreased trend' instead of 'downward trend'. Less common vocabulary is attempted with varying degrees of accuracy, but communication is not impeded.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5
The writer uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, such as 'The line graph illustrates the number of participants...' and 'While, Amateur dramatics has 25 participants in 2000 and the decreased trend till 2020...'. There are several grammatical errors and awkward structures, including tense inconsistencies (mixing present and past tenses inappropriately like 'The film club has roughly 75 participants in 2000') and missing articles ('has above 50 participants'). Punctuation and comma splices also occur, but meaning remains generally clear.
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