Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The graph illustrates the information about different activities done by the individuals at one social criteria in Melbourne, Australia between 2000 to 2020.
Overall, it is clear that flim club is the only club where the most participants were seen and steady throughout the activities. Meanwhile, amateur dramatics is the only club that is fluctuating and going down, whereas table tennis is the only activity that makes the individual go high overtime.
Martial arts club is not steady.It has only 36 members at the beginning of 2000 and it fluctuate overtime which doesnot change the participants that much in 2020. Amateur dramatics goes down with time. It has 26 participants in 2000 while it suddenly fell by 20 in 2010 and was low in 2020 by only lefting 9 participants. Another biggest change is seen in table tennis that is only 16 at 2000 ,20 in 2010 ,36 in 2015 and 55 in 2020.
On the other hand, musical performances also have changes over time that is seen clearly. It has 0 participants in the beginning but have 20 over time in 2020. Flim club is the only club where the craze is still the same in all time period. It has 63 members in the beginning of 2000, 61 in 2010 with small dramatic change but over 65 in 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to cover the main features of the chart, including general trends and specific figures for the various activities, such as the film club and table tennis. However, there are notable inaccuracies in reporting the data. For instance, the student states that amateur dramatics had 'only lefting 9 participants' in 2020, whereas the graph indicates approximately 6 participants. Similarly, musical performances are stated to have '20 over time in 2020', which slightly misreads the figure of roughly 18. Furthermore, the overview contains imprecise language and minor generalisations about the trends. While all parts of the prompt are addressed, the precision of data reporting prevents a higher score.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response is divided into paragraphs, which helps structure the information. However, the logical progression is sometimes hindered by awkward transitions and phrasing, such as 'Meanwhile, amateur dramatics is the only club that is fluctuating and going down, whereas table tennis is the only activity that makes the individual go high overtime.' Cohesive devices are used, but their application is occasionally mechanical or repetitive (e.g., 'On the other hand...'). Paragraphing is present, but the internal grouping of ideas lacks smooth connectivity, resulting in a somewhat disjointed flow.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is relatively basic and repetitive, with frequent lexical errors and awkward collocations. Examples include 'social criteria' instead of 'social centre', 'flim club' (spelling error), 'craze is still the same', and 'lefting 9 participants'. Attempts at less common vocabulary are either inaccurate or restricted to simple descriptive phrases like 'suddenly fell' and 'biggest change'. These errors occasionally draw attention, but they do not completely impede communication.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The student uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but control over grammar is inconsistent. There are frequent grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('musical performances also have changes... but have 20'), incorrect verb tenses, and awkward phrasing ('doesnot change the participants that much'). Punctuation is generally acceptable, but structural inaccuracies are frequent enough to cause some difficulty for the reader at times.
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