Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The graph below illustrates the information about member for various activities in perticular one social center in Melbouren, Australia since the year 2000 or 2020.
Overall, film club is having highest number of participants approximately 65 member that number remains stable till 2020 but in 2010 that number drops to 60 members which is still the highest among all other activity. Another activity called table tennis almost had 18 members in 2000, this number slightly increased 2005 around 20 and remains same till 2010. Afterwards, rate in member of film club rapadely inclined nearly 50 upto 2020.
Martial arts the figure fluctuating continuesly which was 45 approx in 2000 and declied by 4 in 2005 then rose again in the year 2010 which make it around 40 and a facing a minimal decline nearly 5 participants in 2015, evantually, in 2020 the number surged to total 39 member in activity. Moreover, another activity of Amateure dramatics was at around 27 participants in 2000, the number slightly escalated in the year 2005 which make the figure around 29, afterwards there was a sudden change occured from 2005 to 2020 and the number fell from 29 to nearly 8 participants. Additionally, Musical performance were started in the year 2005 fro zero members and this number is increased to 10 contestants and rise continuesly untill 2020 and having around 18 participants.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to address all parts of the task by reporting on several activities and trends over the twenty-year period. An overview is attempted, identifying the film club as having the highest figures. However, the response contains numerous inaccuracies and misreadings of the data. For instance, the student states that martial arts started at '45 approx in 2000' whereas the chart shows it at approximately 36. Similarly, musical performances are described as starting from zero in 2005, but reaching '10 contestants', which misinterprets the metric of participants. The details regarding trends and specific years are often confused, leading to an underdeveloped representation of the main features and comparisons.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response is divided into paragraphs, attempting an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs for individual activities. However, the logical progression is frequently disrupted by poor sequencing and confusing transitions. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or repetitively, such as 'Additionally' and 'afterwards there was a sudden change occured', which makes the flow mechanical. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the internal organisation within paragraphs fails to effectively guide the reader through the comparative trends shown in the graph.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is limited and repetitive, with frequent word choice and spelling errors that occasionally impede communication. Examples of non-standard usage and misspellings include 'perticular', 'Melbouren', 'member' instead of members, 'rapadely inclined', 'declied', 'evantually', and 'Amateure'. While the student attempts some less common vocabulary ('fluctuating', 'surged', 'escalated'), inaccuracies in collocation and form prevent the response from achieving a higher band score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but control over grammar is weak throughout the text. There are numerous grammatical errors, including missing auxiliary verbs ('film club is having highest number', 'Musical performance were started'), incorrect prepositions, and faulty tense usage ('that number remains stable till 2020'). Punctuation is also problematic, with several run-on sentences joined incorrectly by commas (e.g., 'Another activity called table tennis almost had 18 members in 2000, this number slightly increased...'). These frequent errors cause difficulty for the reader.
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