Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The graph. depicts the information of for the of the actly student participated students which taken part in different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the

in

year

2000 was.

year

2000 to 2020.

In the filum club the number of participants presented nearly 65, gradually it fell till. the year 2010 and noticably incasact increased and peaked by the end of the period. There is totally a fluctuation. in the martial arts activity, when it started there was 38 participants & and ended with the same figure of year 2020.

at the end

Incidently, the actual awarness of the musical performances arise from the year 2005 and steeply till the year 2020, remarkably degraded

whereas

amage dramatics flowed

tennt's conti

2010,

over the years passed. The fable tat tennis gradually marked presence ## by the then it sharply climbed thrice the from the actual

start

of

the

year.

year

Overall, table tennis and musical performance had captured an accelerate to the figures, while film club and martial arts were consistent also and there was the least interest in the amateur dramatics at the end

of the

year.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The student attempts to address the task by describing features of the provided line graph regarding participation rates in various activities between 2000 and 2020. However, the response suffers from significant comprehension and transcription issues, such as misinterpreting data points and trends (e.g., stating that musical performances started in 2005 when the graph shows zero, and misreading amateur dramatics). Although an overall trend summary is attempted, the information is disjointed, and key comparisons are often imprecise or inaccurate compared to the provided visual data. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed, earning a Band 5.0.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The organization of the response is fragmented. The student attempts paragraphing, but erratic sentence structures, crossing-out marks, and disjointed phrases disrupt the logical flow and progression. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or inaccurately (e.g., 'Incidently, the actual awarness...', 'whereas amage dramatics flowed...'). While there is a rudimentary overall structure including an introduction and a concluding summary, referencing is frequently unclear, making the progression difficult to follow at times. This aligns with the Band 5 descriptors for Coherence and Cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is very limited and heavily strained by numerous spelling mistakes and awkward word choices, such as 'filum club', 'noticably incasact', 'awarness', 'amage', and 'tannte's'. While the student attempts some less common vocabulary related to data reporting (e.g., 'fluctuation', 'peaked', 'accelerate'), these attempts are marred by inaccurate collocation and form. Vocabulary errors frequently cause strain for the reader and obscure precise meaning, which places this performance firmly at Band 4.5, rounded to Band 5.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The grammatical range is extremely limited, relying heavily on simple structures with frequent attempts at complex clauses that result in severe errors and ungrammatical strings (e.g., 'The graph. depicts the information of for the of the actly student participated students...'). Punctuation and sentence boundaries are often ignored or misplaced, with stray words and fragments scattered throughout the text. Frequent major grammatical errors cause considerable difficulty for the reader, matching the standard for Band 4.0.

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