Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The graph provides information about the numbers who has participated in various activities at one social centre at Melbourne, Australia between the period of 2000 and 2020.
Overall, film club was top of the number in all activities over the period though it faced some flactuation. While table was also increasing throughout the time. On the other hand Amateur dramatics faced a dramtic downfall. And rest of like martial arts were flactuate and musical performances had slight increase.
Film club was always highest in all activities over the 20 years period and mostly it was approximately more than 60 perticipants followed by table tennis till 2010 it had slight rise around 20 perticipant but after that there was a significant increase for this activity crossed the 50 perticipant in 2020. In contrast amateur faced a large drop in its perticipant after 2005 till the ending year number was less than 10. Martial art was always flactuate throgh the whole period and always was near 40 perticipant and musical performances had moderate increase by the time which was around 20 perticipant and it overtake the amateur perticipant number after 2015.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The student covers all parts of the task by reporting the main features and trends of the five activities shown in the graph. An overview is provided at the beginning, noting the general dominance of the film club and the contrasting dramatic downfall of amateur dramatics. Key features, such as the peak of the film club and the significant rise in table tennis, are supported with data (e.g., crossing 50 participants in 2020). However, there are some minor inaccuracies and approximations in reading the specific figures, such as stating martial arts was 'always near 40 participants' when it hovered around 32-38, and a few awkward expressions in the overview. Overall, the task is adequately addressed, meeting the requirements for a Band 6.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response has a coherent overall arrangement, featuring an introductory paragraph with an overview, followed by a body paragraph detailing the trends. However, paragraphing is weak as the student compresses most of the body text into a single, dense paragraph. Cohesive devices are sometimes mechanical or repetitive, such as 'While table was also increasing' and 'On the other hand', and referencing is occasionally unclear ('rest of like martial arts'). Logical progression is present, but the lack of proper paragraph breaks and somewhat faulty cohesion limit the score to Band 5.5.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, attempting less common items such as 'flactuation' (fluctuation), 'dramtic downfall' (dramatic downfall), and 'significant increase'. However, there are frequent spelling errors ('flactuation', 'perticipant') and word choice inaccuracies ('numbers who has participated', 'top of the number'). Less common vocabulary is attempted with limited success, and spelling mistakes can occasionally cause mild reader strain, placing this performance firmly at Band 5.5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
A mix of simple and some complex sentence forms is attempted, such as 'While table was also increasing throughout the time.' However, there are frequent grammatical and structural errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues ('the numbers who has participated', 'amateur faced... number was less than 10'), missing prepositions ('at Melbourne'), and fragment sentences ('And rest of like martial arts were flactuate...'). While these errors do not completely impede communication, they occur regularly, supporting a Band 5.0 score.
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