Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph illustrates the number of participants for different activities such as film club,martial arts,amateur dramatics,table tennis and musical performance at one social centre in Melbourne,Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Overall,the number of participants highly intrested in film club throughout the period,whereas in Amateur dramatics activity participants decresed their intrest after few years.
To begin with, the number of participants in film club was the highest among other four activities throughout the period. In 2000, number of paricipants was approx 65 slightly reduced during 2010,than gradually increased and reach up to 68.
whereas, the participants for table tennis, amateur dramatics and material arts are 15,25 and 45 in year 2000.amateur dramatics and table tennis activity showed similar increasing trend in 2005 and participants highly intrested in table tennis and reach up to the 55 while amateur dramatics suddenly decreased the number was only 5 in year 2020. while martial arts showed flactuating trend throughout the year.whereas musical performance had 0 participants during 2000 to 2005 than rapidly increased reach up to 15 in the year 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The student successfully identifies the main activities and covers the overall time period from 2000 to 2020. An overview is attempted, noting that the film club remained popular while amateur dramatics decreased. Key features are reported, such as the film club maintaining the highest numbers and table tennis experiencing significant growth from 16 to 54 participants. However, some specific data points contain inaccuracies or vague references, such as stating martial arts started at 45 (actual was 36) and minor confusions with figures. The response meets the minimum word count requirement and covers all major trends, placing it squarely in the Band 6 category.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response is arranged with an introduction, an overview paragraph, and a body section, providing a coherent overall arrangement. Cohesive devices such as 'To begin with', 'whereas', and 'throughout the period' are used to link ideas, although some transitions feel a bit mechanical or are awkwardly structured (e.g., 'whereas, the participants for table tennis... are 15,25 and 45'). Paragraphing is present, but the body of the report is clumped into overly long and dense paragraphs rather than being broken down logically by activity or trend. Referencing is generally clear, but the flow is occasionally disrupted by punctuation and spacing errors.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, successfully incorporating descriptive terms like 'fluctuating trend', 'rapidly increased', and 'participants'. However, there are noticeable lexical inaccuracies and spelling errors throughout the text, such as 'intrested' instead of 'interested', 'decresed', 'material arts' instead of 'martial arts', and 'flactuating'. Less common vocabulary is attempted with mixed success. While communication is not impeded, these frequent mechanical and spelling errors prevent the lexical score from reaching Band 6.5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, incorporating clauses with 'whereas' and relative time markers. However, grammatical accuracy is weak, featuring frequent errors such as missing articles ('number of paricipants'), subject-verb agreement issues ('participants for table tennis... are'), and run-on sentences with comma splices. Punctuation and spacing are also problematic (e.g., missing spaces after commas). While some error-free simple sentences exist, the high frequency of grammatical and mechanical slips restricts the score to Band 5.0.
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