Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph illustrates the engagement of participants in five various activities at single social center in Melbourne, Australia between 2000 and 2020.
Overall, film club remained the popular activity throughout the period, martial arts on the other hand accounted for second favourite choice. Although, table tennis experienced a substantial rise by 2020. However, a considerable decline recorded by amateur dramatics. Musical performances started raising after five years and increased moderatly.
In 2000, 64 participants joined film club and the numbers steadily declined till 2010, that subsequently rose to 65 by the 2020. While, number of people in martial arts fluctuated between 30 and 40 in 20 years. Amateur dramatics admitted 27 candidates in 2000 and the number gradually increased by 29, afterwards the figure significant declined to only 5 people by 2020.
In contrast, table tennis was the least popular activity in 2000 with 16 number of participants, in 2005 the number raised to 19 and remained almost constant at 20 in 2010. From 2010 to 2020 table tennis figure climed to peak and surpassed the martial arts and amateur dramatics. Musical performances was the least popular activity in 2000 with zero participants, but in 2005 it started raising gradually and almost 19 people joined the dance club by 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0
The candidate successfully addresses all parts of the task by reporting the main features, trends, and comparisons of the five activities shown in the line graph. An overview is provided at the beginning, highlighting the general popularity of the film club and martial arts, as well as the significant trends in table tennis and amateur dramatics. Key data points are selected and reported accurately, such as the peak of the film club at 64 in 2000 and 66 in 2020, and the dramatic rise of table tennis from 16 to 54. However, there are minor inaccuracies in some specific figures, such as stating amateur dramatics admitted 27 candidates in 2000 when the chart shows 26, and mentioning 65 instead of 66 for the film club in 2020. Despite these minor discrepancies, the overall response fulfills the requirements of Task 1 effectively.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response is arranged coherently with a logical overall progression. Information is grouped reasonably well, separating the overview, general trends, and specific data details into distinct paragraphs. Cohesive devices are used to connect ideas, such as 'Overall', 'In 2000', and 'In contrast', which help guide the reader through the data. However, paragraphing could be structured more cleanly, and some cohesive relationships are slightly mechanical or awkward, such as starting a sentence with 'Although' without completing the dependent clause structure correctly in the second sentence of the introduction. Referencing is mostly clear, though occasional transitions disrupt the natural flow of ideas between sentences.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, attempting less common items such as 'engagement', 'substantial rise', 'considerable decline', and 'surpassed'. However, there are several lexical errors, incorrect word forms, and awkward collocations throughout the text, including 'five various activities' instead of 'five different activities', 'started raising' instead of 'started rising', 'moderatly' (spelling error), 'candidates' instead of 'participants', and 'climed' (spelling error). Furthermore, referring to musical performances as a 'dance club' in the final sentence is factually inaccurate based on the chart labels. These errors indicate a Band 6 level for lexical resource.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5
The response includes a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. The candidate attempts complex forms with dependent clauses and comparative structures, but control over grammar is inconsistent. There are several grammatical errors and awkward phrasings, such as 'at single social center' (missing article), 'film club remained the popular activity' (missing article), 'table tennis figure climed' (incorrect singular/plural agreement or possessive structure), and incomplete dependent clauses like 'Although, table tennis experienced a substantial rise by 2020. However, a considerable decline recorded by amateur dramatics.' Punctuation and article usage need closer attention. These errors occasionally cause minor strain for the reader, fitting the Band 6 descriptor.
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