Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The graph illustrates gives the information on the figur of participants for several activities at one social center in melbourn, australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Overview, given the graph there are five line graph while, two graph is increase name as table tennis and musical performances as campared to other two is remained constant and one is declined rapidly, through out the periods.

Beggin. from 2000 graph of film at 64% this graph flactuated and after remained stayed until end at 2020.on other side, in 2000 graph martial art at fugure of 37% and amateur dramatic graph from 27% this graph 2005 meet then, amateur fell down rapidle and martial art alter from reached at 2020.furthermore, table tennis started from number 16% this graph beggin slowly that reach from 2010 and here upward boot up suddenly peak at 2020.the last one graph musical instruments initiate at 2005 this graph increase steadily from arrived at 2020.finally all the graph number of participants table tennis increase rapidly amateur decreased gradually similar to four activity and other activity stayed constant overall the periods.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response attempts to cover the main features of the graph, identifying general trends such as increases in table tennis and musical performances, and a decrease in amateur dramatics. However, the task achievement is significantly hindered by numerous misreadings of the data and inaccurate figures. For instance, the student states that the film club started at 64% and that martial arts was at 37%, using percentages rather than raw numbers of participants. Furthermore, some descriptions of trends are vague or confused, such as stating that musical instruments initiated at 2005 when the graph actually shows 2010. While an overview is attempted, the lack of accurate data reporting and flawed synthesis place this response at Band 4.0 according to the task achievement descriptors.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The essay lacks clear paragraphing, with ideas lumped together in a confusing manner, which heavily disrupts the logical flow and progression. Cohesive devices are either missing, inaccurate, or heavily misused (e.g., 'Overview, given the graph...', 'Beggin. from 2000...'). Sentences are strung together with weak punctuation and improper transitions, making the text difficult to follow. Although there is an attempt to group information by activity, referencing is frequently unclear, and the overall structural arrangement fails to meet the standards for a cohesive academic report. This warrants a Band 4.0 for coherence and cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The lexical range is very limited and repetitive, with frequent spelling and word-choice errors that impede communication. Words are often misused or deformed, such as 'figur' for figure, 'melbourn' for Melbourne, 'flactuated' for fluctuated, 'rapidle' for rapidly, and 'boot up' for a sudden increase. The student also incorrectly applies percentage signs (%) to absolute participant numbers throughout the text. While basic terms like 'increase', 'decrease', and 'constant' are attempted, the high frequency of lexical inaccuracies and inappropriate vocabulary choices restrict the score to a Band 4.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The response demonstrates a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on simple, fragmented, and run-on sentences. Complex structures are attempted but are consistently faulty, lacking proper subject-verb agreement, tense consistency, and clause connection (e.g., 'the graph illustrates gives the information', 'two graph is increase name as table tennis', 'this graph beggin slowly that reach from 2010'). Punctuation is largely absent or misused, leading to sentences that run into one another. Errors are very frequent across the entire text and frequently distort the intended meaning, aligning the performance with Band 4.0 descriptors.

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