Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The graph below illustrates the information about member for various activities in perticular one social center in Melbouren, Australia since the year 2000 or 2020.
Overall, film club is having highest number of participants approximately 65 member that number remains stable till 2020 but in 2010 that number drops to 60 members which is still the highest among all other activity. Another activity called table tennis almost had 18 members in 2000, this number slightly increased 2005 around 20 and remains same till 2010. Afterwards, rate in member of film club rapadely inclined nearly 50 upto 2020.
Martial arts the figure fluctuating continuesly which was 45 approx in 2000 and declied by 4 in 2005 then rose again in the year 2010 which make it around 40 and a facing a minimal decline nearly 5 participants in 2015, evantually, in 2020 the number surged to total 39 member in activity. Moreover, another activity of Amateure dramatics was at around 27 participants in 2000, the number slightly escalated in the year 2005 which make the figure around 29, afterwards there was a sudden change occured from 2005 to 2020 and the number fell from 29 to nearly 8 participants. Additionally, Musical performance were started in the year 2005 fro zero members and this number is increased to 10 contestants and rise continuesly untill 2020 and having around 18 participants.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to address the task by reporting information on the various activities shown in the graph. An overview is attempted in the second paragraph, mentioning the film club. However, the response contains numerous significant inaccuracies in reporting the data. For instance, the student states that martial arts was '45 approx in 2000' whereas the actual figure was around 36. Similarly, musical performances are stated to have reached 10 contestants in 2005, whereas the graph clearly shows zero participation in that year. The selection of data is erratic, mixing overview elements with detailed figures without a clear, structured progression. Consequently, Task Achievement falls into Band 5.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response is divided into paragraphs, but the logical flow is frequently disrupted. Cohesive devices are misused or repetitive, such as 'Furthermore, another activity of...' and 'Additionally, Musical performance were...'. The overall organisation lacks a clear structure, jumping between different categories and years without a cohesive narrative. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the mechanical use of transition words makes the progression difficult to follow. This aligns with Band 5 descriptors.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with numerous spelling and word-choice errors throughout the text (e.g., 'perticular' instead of particular, 'Melbouren', 'member' instead of members, 'rapadely', 'inclined', 'declied', 'evantually', 'Amateure'). The range of vocabulary is limited and adequate only for basic communication. While the student attempts some less common verbs like 'surged' or 'escalated', the persistent spelling and lexical errors restrict the score to Band 5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but many complex structures are faulty or run-on sentences (e.g., 'Another activity called table tennis almost had 18 members in 2000, this number slightly increased 2005 around 20 and remains same till 2010'). Grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('Musical performance were started') and missing prepositions, occur frequently and can cause some difficulty for the reader. The control over grammar and punctuation is weak, placing the response at Band 5.
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