Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph illustrates information on the numbers of people spent time on different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Austrlia between 2000 and 2020.
Overall, the proportion of Flim club and Table tennis accounted the highest, while Amateur dramatics was drop down over the period. Apparentely Martial arts remained similar, but it slightly fluctuate between the years.
In 2000, Amateur dramatics was initiated around 25 people by the 2005 it surge with 30 participants and then it levelled off with 9 people. In contrast, Musical performance was zero participants unit 2005, following year it occured 11 people and in 2020 it increased with 20 which was the starting of Table tennis.
The participants of Table tennis was accounted for 18 which was dramatically soared 55 people, Moreover it occures the second highest participants. The participants of Film club at around 65 it was inclined with 69. However, Martial arts was fluctuates over the period and the starting and end up with same people.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to cover the main features of the graph, identifying the highest participation for the Film club and Table tennis, and noting the downward trend in Amateur dramatics and the stability of Martial arts. However, the response suffers from significant data inaccuracies and misreadings of the graph. For instance, the student states that Amateur dramatics 'levelled off with 9 people' and that Musical performances started at zero and went to 11 and then 20, whereas the actual figures deviate from these claims. Furthermore, the overview mentions the 'proportion' of activities rather than numbers, and some trends are inaccurately described. Because several reported figures do not match the visual data and key comparisons are confused, the task is addressed only partially, placing this criterion at Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response is divided into paragraphs, starting with an introduction followed by an overview and body paragraphs. However, the overall progression is difficult to follow due to poor sentence construction and abrupt transitions. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or inaccurately, such as 'In contrast, Musical performance was zero participants unit 2005, following year it occured 11 people'. Referencing between sentences is frequently unclear, making it hard for the reader to track which data points are being discussed. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion within paragraphs is weak and mechanical. This level of organisation and referencing corresponds to a Band 5.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The student attempts a range of vocabulary related to data trends, using words such as 'proportion', 'surges', 'dramatically soared', and 'fluctuates'. However, there are frequent word-choice and collocation errors, such as 'spent time on different activities', 'Amateur dramatics was initiated around 25 people', and 'it occures the second highest'. Spelling errors also occur, such as 'Austrlia', 'Flim', and 'Apparentely'. While the vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey a basic summary of trends, the numerous inaccuracies in word formation and precise meaning restrict the lexical score to a Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but control over grammar is weak throughout the response. There are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with verb tenses, voice, and prepositions. Examples include 'the proportion of Flim club and Table tennis accounted the highest, while Amateur dramatics was drop down', 'Musical performance was zero participants unit 2005', and 'Martial arts was fluctuates over the period and the starting and end up with same people.' These frequent errors cause considerable difficulty for the reader and mean that error-free sentences are rare. This performance aligns with the Band 5.0 descriptors.
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