Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph illustrates the changes in numbers of participants over a specific period, from 2000 to 2020.
Overall, it is evident that trend shows a fluctuating period throughout the period. People from five different categories participated. This included film club, martial arts, amateur dramatics, table tennis and musical performances.
In 2000, Table tennis activity reported with 15 participants. It increased gradually with total 55 participants in 2010. similarly, people participating in musical performances were initially zero in 2000, but it rose to 18 participants in 2020.
On the other hand, decline in trent was seen in activities such as film club, martial arts and amateur dramatics. Individuals who took part in film club were 64 in 2000, but it dropped to 61 in 2010. However, in 2010, the number increased to 65. Moreover, martial arts participants were not constant in number with 36 and 35 in 2000 and 2010 respectively. Furthermore, participants in amateur dramatics were 35 in 2000, but the number dropped steadily until it reached 7 in 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to address the task by reporting on the main categories, such as film club, table tennis, and musical performances. However, there are notable inaccuracies in reading the data from the graph. For instance, the student states that Table tennis started with 15 participants in 2000 and reached 55 in 2010, whereas the correct figures are approximately 16 and 20 respectively, with the major surge happening after 2010. Furthermore, the overview is rather vague, merely stating that the trend shows a fluctuating period without highlighting the most significant overall patterns, such as the dramatic rise of table tennis versus the steep decline of amateur dramatics. Due to inaccurate data reporting and underdeveloped overview features, this falls into the Band 5.0 range.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response is organized into four paragraphs, following a logical layout of introduction, overview, and body paragraphs focusing on different activities. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'In 2000', 'similarly', and 'On the other hand', but some transitions are misused or awkward, such as starting the overview with 'it is evident that trend shows'. Paragraphing is generally appropriate, and the progression of information is discernible, although the weak data handling disrupts clear logical flow. Overall, the organizational structure meets the requirements for a Band 6.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary relevant to the visual data, including terms like 'participants', 'category', 'gradually', and 'rose'. However, there are noticeable lexical and collocation errors, such as 'trend shows a fluctuating period', 'Table tennis activity reported with', and 'decline in trent'. The misspelling of 'trend' as 'trent' and awkward phrasing like 'reported with' detract from the precision of the writing. The lexical range is sufficient for the task but lacks flexibility, placing it firmly in the Band 5.0 to 5.5 category.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as 'Individuals who took part in film club were 64 in 2000, but it dropped to 61 in 2010.' However, there are frequent grammatical errors and awkward phrasing throughout, including subject-verb agreement issues ('trend shows') and missing articles or prepositions ('Table tennis activity reported with'). Punctuation is generally acceptable, but grammatical inaccuracies cause some minor strain for the reader. These issues reflect the descriptors for Band 5.0.
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