Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.5)
The provided line graph illustrates the number of participants for various activities at a social centre in Melbourne, Australia from 2000 to 2020. Overall, the film club and martial arts participants remained constant during the given period, while the table tennis and musical performers increased from 2000 to 2020. The amateur dramatics participants decreased over the 20 years.
The number of film club and martial arts participants was approximately 65 and 45, respectively, in 2000. Although these numbers varied marginally in 2010, they remained unchanged till 2020. The numbers for amateur dramatics were around 25 in 2000, and they rose to 30 in 2005, followed by a consistent decline and fell to just under 10 in 2020.
On the other hand, the table tennis players were approximately 15 in 2000 before undergoing a slight increase to 20 in 2005. In 2010, the players' participation saw a sharp increase, and the numbers surged to 50 in 2020, while musical performers began participating in 2005 and continued their rise during this period, and attained their peak of 15 members in 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5
The response covers all parts of the task well, providing an overview and reporting the main features with relevant comparisons. The student correctly identifies the main trends for all five activities, noting stability in the film club and martial arts, increases in table tennis and musical performances, and a decline in amateur dramatics. However, there are a few minor inaccuracies in the data points reported; for instance, martial arts in 2000 was closer to 35 rather than 45, and amateur dramatics in 2000 was around 26 rather than 25. Despite these minor discrepancies, the overall picture of the data is accurately captured and presented with sufficient detail to meet the higher band descriptors.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5
The text is logically organised with a clear progression from an introduction and general overview into detailed body paragraphs. Paragraphing is used appropriately, with the second body paragraph effectively contrasting table tennis and musical performances using cohesive devices such as 'On the other hand'. Reference words and conjunctions are generally used well to maintain flow, although occasional transitions could be smoother. Overall, the essay is easy to follow and demonstrates a coherent structure throughout.
Lexical Resource: Band 6.0
The student uses a sufficient range of vocabulary appropriate for an academic task, including terms like 'participants', 'fluctuated' (implied via variation), 'decline', 'surge', and 'peak'. Less common lexical items are attempted with some awareness of collocation and style, such as 'consistent decline' and 'sharp increase'. There are occasional slight inaccuracies in word choice or data interpretation, but vocabulary use is adequate to convey the intended meaning clearly without impeding communication.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0
A mix of simple and complex sentence structures is used throughout the response, incorporating clauses of concession and time such as 'Although these numbers varied marginally...' and 'before undergoing a slight increase'. The majority of sentences are grammatically sound, though there are a few minor errors or awkward phrasings, such as 'fell to just under 10' following a compound verb structure less smoothly. Punctuation and sentence boundaries are generally well controlled, allowing for clear and easy reading.
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