Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph illustrates data on the numbers of participants for verious activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for a perticular period. Overall, it is seen that film club experienced an upward trend, while amateur dramatics followed a downward trend over given the period. It is also noticeable that table tennis recorded the second highest figure in the graph.
According to the chart, the participants of film club was highest over the period, it stood at approximately 65 in 2000. The figure fell to 60 but it rose to 66 in 2020. The number of participants of martial arts was flactuated. In 2020, it accouted for 46 almost. The figure of musical performances increased from 2005. The figure was showed upward trend and followed at 19.
the number ofable tennis
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarise the main features of the line graph, providing an overview and mentioning several trends, such as the film club and amateur dramatics. However, the response is incomplete, ending abruptly mid-sentence with "the number ofable tennis" and failing to finish the description. Furthermore, the length requirement of 150 words is not met, as the response contains only 132 words, which incurs a penalty. There are also notable inaccuracies in data reporting; for instance, the writer states that martial arts accounted for "almost 46" in 2020, whereas the actual figure was around 36. Due to the incomplete nature of the response, under-length status, and data misinterpretations, the score is limited to Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The text exhibits some organisation with an introduction that includes a general overview ("Overall, it is seen that...") and separate body sentences. However, overall progression is disrupted by the abrupt ending and lack of complete paragraphing. Cohesive devices are basic and repetitive, such as "The figure fell... The figure was showed...", leading to mechanical referencing. While the relationships between ideas can generally be followed in the initial sentences, the lack of a conclusion and the unfinished final line significantly detract from the coherence of the overall piece. This performance aligns with Band 5.0 descriptors.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is adequate for a basic summary, incorporating terms like "upward trend", "downward trend", and "participants". However, there are multiple spelling and word-choice errors, such as "verious" instead of various, "perticular" instead of particular, "flactuated" instead of fluctuated, and "accouted" instead of accounted. The writer attempts some less common vocabulary, but the frequency of spelling mistakes and inaccurate collocations ("the figure was showed upward trend") restricts the lexical score to Band 5.0, as these errors occasionally cause strain for the reader.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and some complex sentence forms, such as "Overall, it is seen that film club experienced an upward trend, while amateur dramatics followed a downward trend over given the period." However, grammatical accuracy is weak, with errors including missing articles ("over given the period", "the participants of film club was highest"), preposition errors, and awkward phrasing ("followed at 19"). Moreover, the response trails off into an incomplete sentence fragment at the end. These persistent errors and lack of control in complex structures place the grammar score at Band 5.0.
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