Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph illustrates the information about on the numbers of participants for different acitivities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia over the 20 years period from 2000 to 2020.
Overall it is explicitly clear that number of persons in film club member show an upward trend while amateur dramatics activities drmatically decreasing. Musical performances were starting at 2005 at show a significant rose trend over the period.
In 2000 Film club number of members were stood at about 65 although martial arts number of participants around 38. Amateur dramtics number of participants approximately at 27. In the next 5 year period film club members slightly decrease at nearly 62 and martial art members also fall gradually about 30. amateur dramatics activitists rose significantly. Table tannis players were standing at around number of 18 while musical performances were not starting at 2000
In 2010 film club members and table tennis members go down slightly respectively about at 59 and 19, whereas amateur dramatics people decresed sharply and martial arts number of people rose slightly around at 39. Over the next 10 year period all the members of different activities show an upward trend with different numbers of people
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to address all parts of the prompt by identifying main trends and specific data points for the given period. An overview is present, noting the upward trend in the film club and the decline in amateur dramatics. However, the response contains several inaccuracies in reading the data. For instance, the student states that amateur dramatics activists rose significantly in the 2000-2005 period, whereas the graph shows an increase from 26 to 28 (a very minor rise) followed by a continuous decrease. Similarly, the summary of 2010 figures and subsequent trends contains confusions. Because of these factual inaccuracies and a lack of clear comparison in places, the response falls into the Band 5 category.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The text is divided into paragraphs, but the overall organisation lacks a clear logical progression. The introduction is followed by an overview that is somewhat clunky, and the body paragraphs jump between years and categories without a smooth cohesive thread. Cohesive devices are either missing or used mechanically (e.g., repeating 'In 2000', 'In 2010'). Referencing and transitions between sentences are weak, causing the reader to struggle in following the chronological development of the data. Paragraphing is attempted but internal cohesion is faulty. This aligns with Band 5 descriptors.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with frequent spelling and word-choice errors. Examples of spelling and grammatical slips include 'acitivities', 'drmatically', 'tannis', and 'decresed'. The student attempts some less common vocabulary such as 'upward trend' and 'significant', but general control is limited. There are noticeable errors that sometimes impede communication or make phrases unnatural, such as 'show a significant rose trend' instead of 'showed a significant upward trend'. This performance corresponds to Band 5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response demonstrates a limited range of sentence structures. Simple sentences dominate, and attempts at complex or compound structures frequently contain grammatical errors, such as 'The line graph illustrates the information about on the numbers' (preposition error) and 'Musical performances were starting at 2005 at show a significant rose trend' (tense and preposition errors). Punctuation is also problematic, with missing full stops and capitalisation issues. Frequent errors cause some difficulty for the reader, matching the Band 5 criteria.
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