Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The given line graph illustrates the individuals that attend in numerous activities such as film club, martial arts, amateur dramatics, table tennis, and musical performances at a community center in Melbourne, Australia between 2000 to 2020.
Overall, Table tennis experienced a significant trend. Conversely, the participants of amateur dramatics declined substantially, while attendance of film club and martial arts remained relatively stable. Even though musical performances gone through a upward trend, it consistently representing one of the the smallest portion of the participants.
Table tennis participation began at approximately 17 in 2000. Despite minor fluctuations, it rose steadily to reach roundabout 20 by the late 2010s, eventually peaking at roughly 53 in 2020.
Musical performances participation also saw a notable upward trend.
In contrast, amateur dramatics participation started at a high of 26. After fluctuating during the first decade, it entered a period of marked decline, falling to approximately 5 by the end of the period.
Finally, film club participation remained the highest throughout the period. It rose from 64 participants in 2000 to 67 participants in the early 2020s, despite minor fluctuation availability of martial arts remained the same approximately at 36 at the end of the given period.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5
The student successfully addresses all parts of the task by reporting the main features, trends, and comparisons across the five activities between 2000 and 2020. The overview effectively captures the dramatic rise in table tennis, the decline in amateur dramatics, and the relative stability of film club and martial arts. Key data points are accurately cited, such as table tennis peaking in 2020 and film club remaining the highest throughout the period. However, there are minor omissions and slightly underdeveloped details regarding musical performances, which are only briefly mentioned. Overall, the response meets the requirements for Band 7, providing a clear overview and supporting main trends with relevant data.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response features a clear logical organisation and progression throughout. Information is grouped reasonably well by activity across paragraphs. Cohesive devices such as 'Conversely', 'In contrast', and 'Despite' are used to signal comparisons, although some referencing is slightly awkward, as seen in the final paragraph where multiple trends are bundled together ('availability of martial arts remained the same approximately at 36'). Paragraphing is utilised, though paragraph breaks could be better managed to separate distinct categories of trends more cleanly. Cohesion is generally clear, placing this performance solidly at Band 6.5, rounded to 6.0 due to occasional mechanical transitions.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, attempting less common items such as 'significant trend', 'fluctuations', 'notable upward trend', and 'marked decline'. However, there are noticeable word choice and collocation errors, such as 'individuals that attend in numerous activities' instead of 'participate in', and 'musical performances gone through a upward trend' which contains grammatical and lexical slips. Some phrases are slightly unnatural, but meaning is communicated successfully throughout. These limitations place the lexical range at Band 6.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5
The student uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, incorporating subordinating clauses like 'Even though musical performances gone through a upward trend...'. However, there are several grammatical errors and awkward structures, such as missing auxiliary verbs ('musical performances gone through'), incorrect prepositions ('attend in'), and missing articles. Punctuation is generally acceptable, but grammatical accuracy is inconsistent. The errors do not impede communication, matching the Band 6 descriptor where a mix of simple and complex structures is accompanied by frequent minor errors.
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