Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The graph illustrates the regarding information on numbers of participants for different types of activities such as Film club, martial arts, Amateur dramatics, Table tennis and Musical performances at one social center in Melbourne, Australia over the 20 years period from 2000 to 2020.
Overall, Film club remained the most highest activity throughout the time period. In contract, table tennis the second highest participants activity after the film club while the fluctuation occured during that time period.Thirdly, Martial arts fluctuated slightly from 2000 to 2020. However the Amateur dramatics declined and reached zero to 2020.Then musical performaces gradually increased from 2005 to 2020.
Furthermore,all activities increased over that time period except than the amateur dramatics.Moreover, film club participated 65 at starting in 2000 and almost in that 20 years slightly increased and in year 2020 is almost 67.
Additionally, the highest impact occured in table tennis activity because in 2000 participants almost 15 and the end of 20 years period participants 55.Therefore, the next two activities martial activity gradually increased over the twenty years but remains same at the end of period in contrast amateur dramatics same starting point as the othjer activity but its slightly declined the number of paticipants.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response covers all the main activities shown in the graph and attempts to make comparisons. However, there are several noticeable inaccuracies in reporting the data. For example, the student states that 'table tennis the second highest participants activity after the film club', whereas table tennis started as the lowest group in 2000 before rising significantly. Furthermore, stating that 'all activities increased over that time period except than the amateur dramatics' ignores the fluctuations in martial arts. The overview is somewhat confused by inaccurate details. Therefore, the task achievement is limited by these misinterpretations of the visual data.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression is frequently disrupted by awkward transitions and confusing statements (e.g., 'Thirdly, Martial arts fluctuated...'). Cohesive devices are used, but often mechanically or inappropriately, such as 'In contract', 'Thirdly', and 'Furthermore'. Referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the exact relationships between the data points. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion is weak.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is generally basic and repetitive, with several awkward word choices and phrasing errors, such as 'most highest activity', 'table tennis the second highest participants activity', and 'musical performaces'. There are spelling mistakes ('occured', 'performaces', 'othjer', 'paticipants') and unnatural collocations. The range of vocabulary is limited and minimally adequate for the task, meaning it struggles to convey precise meanings smoothly.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The writing contains a limited range of sentence structures, with frequent grammatical errors that often hinder clarity. Examples include missing verbs or prepositions ('table tennis the second highest participants activity', 'film club participated 65 at starting in 2000'), incorrect comparative forms ('most highest'), and awkward clause structures. Complex sentence attempts frequently result in ungrammatical or confusing phrasing. Punctuation errors are also present.
See this exact question answered at other band scores. The same prompt compared across bands.
Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.