Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given line graph depicts how many individuals participated in five distinct activites at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia between 2000 and 2020.
In general, it can be clearly seen that participation in the film club was recorded for the highest, whereas the musical performances were less preferred by participants in the examined years.
Looking at the graph for more details, the number of participants who took part in the film club was recorded for 64 in 2000, after which it remained stable in the following years. Moreover, about 27 participants were likely to take part in the amateur dramatics, although it inclined minimally to 30 in 2005, it witnessed a constant decline by reaching the nadir in 2020. The figure for the martial arts was under between 37 and 30 in the given time-period.
Moving to the next, nobody participated in the musical performances in 2005, however, it followed the upward trend in the next years and stood at 20 in 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0
The student covers all parts of the task by selecting and reporting the main features of the line graph, providing an overview and making relevant comparisons. The introduction paraphrases the prompt well, and the overview highlights the overall highest and lowest participation categories. Key trends are generally reported accurately, such as the stability of the film club and the dramatic decline in amateur dramatics. However, there are some minor inaccuracies or vague approximations in the data reporting, such as stating that martial arts participation was 'under between 37 and 30' and that musical performances stood at 20 in 2020 (when it was closer to 18). Despite these minor data reading slips, the response satisfies the core requirements of Task 1.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response is logically organised into four paragraphs, following a standard introduction, overview, and body paragraph structure. Information is generally presented in a coherent progression, moving across the different activities. Cohesive devices are used to connect ideas, such as 'In general', 'Moreover', and 'Moving to the next'. However, some of the transitions feel slightly mechanical or awkward, such as 'Moving to the next', and referencing between sentences could be smoother. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate different groups of activities, supporting overall readability.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
The vocabulary used is generally adequate for the task, with attempts to use less common items and functional language to describe trends, such as 'remained stable', 'constant decline', and 'upward trend'. However, there are some inappropriate word choices and minor collocation issues, such as 'how many individuals participated was recorded for the highest' and the misuse of 'inclined minimally' instead of 'increased slightly'. Spelling and word formation are generally accurate, but the precision of lexical control prevents the score from reaching a higher band.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5
The student demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several successful complex constructions, such as 'The given line graph depicts how many individuals participated...' and 'although it inclined minimally...'. However, grammatical errors and awkward phrasing occur throughout, including 'was recorded for 64' instead of 'stood at 64' and the clumsy formulation 'was under between 37 and 30'. Punctuation is generally acceptable, and while these errors occasionally create slight strain for the reader, they do not impede overall communication.
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