Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The graph illustrates the information about numbers of participants for different types of activities such as Film club, martial arts, Amateur dramatics, Table tennis and Musical performances at one social center in Melbourne, Australia over the 20-year period from 2000 to 2020.
Overall, Film club remained the highest activity throughout the time period. In contrast, table tennis had second highest number of participants after the film club while fluctuations occurred during that time period.Thirdly, Martial arts fluctuated slightly from 2000 to 2020. However, the Amateur dramatics declined and reached zero by 2020. Then musical performances gradually increased from 2005 to 2020.
Furthermore, all activities increased over that time period except the amateur dramatics. Moreover, the film club had 65 participants at start in 2000 and almost over 20 years slightly increased and in the year 2020 it was almost 67.
Additionally, the highest impact occurred in table tennis activity because in 2000 the number of participants was almost 15 and the end of 20 years period participants 55.Therefore, the next activity martial gradually increased over the twenty years but remained same at the end of period in contrast amateur dramatics same starting point as the other activity but it slightly declined the number of participants.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student covers most parts of the task by reporting on the main categories and noting overall trends, such as the dominance of the Film club and the significant rise in Table tennis. However, the overview contains factual inaccuracies and sweeping generalisations that do not fully align with the visual data. For instance, the student states that "all activities increased over that time period except the amateur dramatics," which ignores the fluctuations and ultimate stagnation of Martial arts and the fact that Musical performances started at zero in 2000. Additionally, some data points are misreported or vague, such as claiming table tennis was the "second highest number of participants after the film club while fluctuations occurred," when table tennis actually started low and surged. This places the response in Band 5.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response is organised into a clear introductory paragraph followed by body paragraphs attempting to group details. However, the overall progression is disrupted by mechanical and repetitive transitions like "Thirdly," "Furthermore," "Moreover," and "Additionally." Paragraphing is somewhat fragmented, with a dense cluster of short sentences that obscure logical connections. Referencing is occasionally unclear, such as "the other activity" and "same starting point," making it difficult for the reader to follow comparisons easily. While there is a basic structure, cohesion is faulty and repetitive, warranting a Band 5 score.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The student demonstrates an adequate vocabulary for the task, successfully incorporating topic-specific terms like "participants," "activities," "fluctuated," and "declined." However, the range is limited, and there are noticeable lexical inaccuracies and awkward word choices, such as calling Film club "the highest activity" rather than the activity with the highest number of participants, and using "highest impact" instead of the most significant growth. Repetition of basic verbs like "increased" and "declined" is frequent. These limitations and errors place the lexical resource at Band 5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but many complex sentences are marred by structural errors, missing prepositions, or awkward phrasing (e.g., "the film club had 65 participants at start in 2000 and almost over 20 years slightly increased and in the year 2020 it was almost 67"). Frequent errors in punctuation, run-on sentences, and missing articles can cause difficulty for the reader. While some error-free basic sentences exist, the high frequency of grammatical faults across complex formations keeps the score at Band 5.
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