Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph illustrates the number of participants, who participated in different activities at social centre in Melbourne, Australia between 2000 to 2020.
Overall, it is clear that the film club had the maximum number of particpants, while table tennis had a sharp increase as compared to musical performances over the same period. In contrast, martial arts fluctuated slightly, while amateur dramatics fell throughout the period.
In 2000, film club participants accounted for around 63, it fell slighltly by 2010 to 60, afterwards it slowly increased by 2020 to 70. Amateur dramatics had approximately 25 participants in 2000, on the hand it fluctuated by 2010, it sharply went up nearest to 60 by 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
The response covers some of the key features of the graph, such as identifying the film club and the overall trends for table tennis and amateur dramatics. However, there are significant data inaccuracies in the body paragraphs. For instance, the student states that amateur dramatics went up to nearly 60 by 2020, whereas the graph clearly shows it falling to 6 participants. Furthermore, the response falls well short of the 150-word minimum, containing only 114 words. Due to these severe under-length penalties and factual misinterpretations, the response aligns with Band 4.5 descriptors.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The writing is organized into an introduction, an overview, and a body paragraph. There is a clear attempt to group information logically and use transitional markers such as 'Overall', 'In contrast', and 'In 2000'. However, paragraphing is underdeveloped due to the brevity of the response, and referencing becomes confusing in the final paragraph where data for amateur dramatics and table tennis appear to be mixed up. Cohesive devices are present but sometimes mechanically applied. This level of organization corresponds to Band 5.5.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
The vocabulary used is generally adequate for the task, with terms like 'participants', 'increased', and 'fluctuated'. However, there are several lexical errors and awkward collocations, such as 'accounted for around 63' (missing units) and spelling slips like 'particpants' and 'slighltly'. The range of vocabulary is rather limited and repetitive, preventing the score from reaching a higher band. Overall, the lexical control fits a Band 5.5 level.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5
The response demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as relative clauses ('who participated in different activities') and comparative structures. There are several grammatical inaccuracies and punctuation slips, including comma splices ('in 2000, film club participants accounted for around 63, it fell slighltly...') and prepositional errors ('at social centre'). While some sentences are accurate, errors persist and occasionally hinder clarity, justifying a Band 5.5 score.
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